Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần nói rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi từ vựng/ cấu trúc (ví dụ “protect new skills” sai và nên là “practice new skills”). Giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 4–5 câu), dùng liên từ để nối ý hợp lý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên (ví dụ tên trò chơi, cảm xúc, tần suất).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and slides with my friends, which helped me practice my coordination. The parks were also a great place to meet other children, so I made many friends there. I went to the park almost every weekend and felt very happy and energetic.

Suggestion: Cần giảm tiếng ừ, lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp/ cấu trúc (ví dụ “because my job, my busy job” lặp). Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi bổ sung chi tiết liên quan bằng liên từ hợp lý (e.g., However, because, so). Thêm thông tin cụ thể về tần suất và hoạt động bạn tham gia khi đi cùng con.

Example: Not really — I rarely go to the park by myself because my work schedule is very busy. However, I take my son to the park almost every day so he can practice skating and play with his friends. When I go with him, I usually sit on a bench and watch or help him practice for about an hour.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (ví dụ “protest skating” không hợp, nên là “practice skating”; “parks also acts” → “parks also act”). Tránh tiếng ừ, dùng liên từ để rõ ràng. Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể về loại công viên bạn muốn (ví dụ có sân chơi, đường chạy bộ) và lợi ích thiết thực.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide clean spaces for fresh air and exercise, such as jogging, walking, or practicing skating. Parks also act as community hubs where families and friends can meet and children can play safely. For example, a park with a playground and a running track would encourage healthier lifestyles.

Suggestion: Cần rõ ràng, sửa phát âm viết thành từ đúng (ví dụ “live in wonders” không rõ nghĩa; nhiều lặp từ và ngắt quãng). Nên nêu tên hoặc mô tả cụ thể công viên bạn muốn đến, lý do rõ ràng (hoạt động, trải nghiệm) và giữ câu ngắn gọn. Tránh lặp từ như “and and” và nói tự tin.

Example: Yes, in the future I would like to visit a large amusement park, for example a place with roller coasters and an aquarium. I would enjoy the exciting rides and also seeing marine animals like fish, turtles and penguins. It would be a fun family trip and a chance to try new activities.

× I loved going to parks because I could play on the swings on the slides with my friend, which helped me protect new skills and stay active.

✓ I loved going to parks because I could play on the swings and the slides with my friends, which helped me practice new skills and stay active.

'on the swings on the slides' is incorrect word choice and coordination; use 'and' and plural 'friends' if referring to more than one friend (Singular and plural issue). 'protect new skills' is incorrect verb choice; the intended meaning is 'practice new skills'. Suggestion: use parallel structure with 'and' and choose the correct verb 'practice'. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Our parks were also great places to meet other children and make new friends, and my mom also gave me a chance to go to the park for exercise.

✓ Our parks were also great places to meet other children and make new friends, and my mom gave me the chance to take me to the park for exercise.

The original mixes ideas awkwardly: 'gave me a chance to go to the park' is understandable but unnatural; clearer phrasing is 'gave me the chance' or 'took me to the park'. Suggestion: decide whether mom 'gave the chance' or 'took' the child and use appropriate verb and object pronouns. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Actually, I don't really like going to the park right now because my job, uh, because of my job, my busy job and my schedule is hectic.

✓ Actually, I don't really like going to the park right now because my job keeps me busy and my schedule is hectic.

Redundant phrases 'because my job, uh, because of my job, my busy job' create a run-on and repetition. Suggestion: remove repetition and use a single clear clause: 'because my job keeps me busy and my schedule is hectic.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× However, my son loves going to the park to practice skating and playing at the playground with his friends.

✓ However, my son loves going to the park to practice skating and to play on the playground with his friends.

Mixing verb forms 'practice skating and playing' is acceptable but parallelism is improved by using 'to practice' and 'to play'. Also 'at the playground' is less natural than 'on the playground'. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and use natural preposition. Grammar problem type ID:1

× So, uh, we usually, uh, go to tech game. We usually take him to the park every day.

✓ So we usually take him to the park every day.

'go to tech game' is unclear and likely an error; duplicate 'we usually' is redundant. Suggestion: remove filler words and unnecessary repetition, keep one clear sentence 'We usually take him to the park every day.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× Of course I would like more parks because they provide clean spaces where people can enjoy fresh air and, uh, exercise such as jogging or walking or protest skating.

✓ Of course I would like more parks because they provide clean spaces where people can enjoy fresh air and exercise such as jogging, walking, or roller skating.

'protest skating' is incorrect word choice; intended 'roller skating' or 'practice skating'. Also punctuation and list formatting need commas. Suggestion: use correct noun 'roller skating' and separate items with commas. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Parks also acts as umm, community hubs with friends and families can match each other and the children can play, which makes the city more pleasant and healthier.

✓ Parks also act as community hubs where friends and families can meet each other and children can play, which makes the city more pleasant and healthier.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Parks' (plural) requires 'act' not 'acts'. 'match each other' is incorrect collocation; use 'meet each other'. Also restructure clause: use 'where' to introduce the place clause. Suggestion: use plural verb 'act' and correct verb 'meet'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× Oh yes, if I have time in the future, I would love to visit a really big amusement park live in wonders because it offers lots of exercise, exciting activities to try and and it's also has an aquarium where you can see many different fish and turtles and, and even, uh, vowel, uh, a Penguin.

✓ Oh yes, if I have time in the future, I would love to visit a really big amusement park like 'Wonderland' because it offers lots of exciting activities to try, and it also has an aquarium where you can see many different fish, turtles, and even penguins.

'live in wonders' is incorrect phrase; likely intended 'like Wonderland' or similar. 'offers lots of exercise' is odd for an amusement park; 'offers lots of exciting activities' is better. Remove duplicate 'and and' and fix 'it's also has' to 'it also has'. Capitalization of 'Penguin' unnecessary. Suggestion: choose correct comparative phrase 'like', fix verb phrase 'it also has', and use plural 'penguins' if general. Grammar problem type ID:4