Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and correct grammar, keep it concise, and add one brief reason with clearer linking. Avoid long run-on sentences and fix verb forms and word choice.

Example: Not really. I preferred indoor activities like reading books and playing video games because I was not very active and I didn't like insects. This meant I spent most of my free time at home.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and countable/uncountable usage, and provide one specific reason with a linking word. Reduce repetition.

Example: Not really. I still rarely go to parks because I am very busy with work and other commitments, so I don’t have time for outdoor activities. For example, I usually spend evenings finishing tasks or studying.

Suggestion: Be more precise and avoid filler words. Use correct grammar and plural/singular forms, and give two clear benefits with a linking word for coherence.

Example: Yes, I would. Parks provide places to sit and relax, and they also offer spaces for exercise such as jogging or yoga. In addition, parks give families a safe place where children can play.

Suggestion: Answer directly, correct collocations and tenses, remove fillers, and give a brief reason with linking word. You can add a minor conditional comment about the future to enrich the answer.

Example: Not at the moment. I’m not very interested in outdoor activities and I need to focus on work and other commitments. However, I might visit a park in the future if I have more free time.

× No, I was not an active person so I prefer it indoor activities like reading books or playing videos game rather than going out.

✓ No, I was not an active person, so I preferred indoor activities like reading books or playing video games rather than going out.

The student mixes past reference ('was not an active person') with present-tense verb 'prefer'. Maintain past tense: use 'preferred'. Also 'it indoor activities' is ungrammatical; remove 'it' and use 'indoor activities'. 'Videos game' should be 'video games' plural. Add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× And I am not a fan of bugs or insects too.

✓ And I was not a fan of bugs or insects either.

Because the student speaks about childhood, the sentence should be past tense ('was'). Use 'either' instead of 'too' in negative contexts for formality. 'Bugs or insects' is redundant but acceptable; keep one or the other for conciseness.

× No, it's still like before.

✓ No, it's still the same as before.

Phrase 'still like before' is unidiomatic. Use 'the same as before' to express unchanged status. 'It's' (it is) is acceptable for present reference to current feelings.

× I barely have time to go to the park and I'm still busy with the works and all the commitments.

✓ I barely have time to go to the park, and I'm still busy with work and other commitments.

'The works' is incorrect: use uncountable 'work' for general tasks. 'All the commitments' is awkward; use 'other commitments'. Add comma before 'and' for readability.

× I rarely visit the park or spending time for activities, outdoor activities.

✓ I rarely visit the park or spend time on outdoor activities.

Parallel structure is required: 'visit' and 'spend' should both be base verbs. Use 'spend time on' (not 'spending time for'). Remove the comma and redundant phrase 'activities, outdoor activities'.

× Yes 'cause I think parts are provide a place to sit, to relax.

✓ Yes, because I think parks provide a place to sit and relax.

'Parts' is a misspelling of 'parks'. 'Are provide' is ungrammatical; use 'provide'. Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. Use 'and' instead of comma and infinitive 'to relax' can be 'and relax' for natural phrasing.

× You could go there to do exercise, uh, jogging, yoga and to the families half child their children could play safely in.

✓ You could go there to exercise, jog, do yoga, and families could let their children play safely there.

Use parallel verbs: 'to exercise, jog, do yoga'. The original has many issues: 'to the families half child their children' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'families could let their children play safely there' for clarity and correct word order.

× No, I don't have one in my mind right now because I am not interested in outdoor activities that much and uh, I think that I still have works and commitments that I need to focus on right now.

✓ No, I don't have any in mind right now because I am not very interested in outdoor activities, and I still have work and commitments I need to focus on.

Use 'any in mind' rather than 'one in my mind' for parks plural or unspecified. 'That much' is informal; 'very' is better. 'Works' should be 'work'. Remove redundant 'right now' at end and streamline sentence. Keep present tense for current state.