Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “I was obsessed with going to parks,” “the park was small but had…”).

Example: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. I was obsessed with picnics with my family and my best friend, and although the park was small, it had a variety of flowers and trees which made it feel special.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and use correct tense and word order. Avoid hesitation sounds and redundant phrases. Give a direct answer then explain briefly with a cause and consequence using linking words like “but” and “so”.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. However, the main park in my town was removed to build a playground, so I don’t visit it anymore; if I had the chance, I would definitely go to other parks nearby.

Suggestion: Be precise and avoid unclear comparisons. Use specific reasons and correct vocabulary (e.g., “parks should be as common as...”). Keep it concise and use linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Replace filler words with pauses. Provide a clear benefit.

Example: Yes, I would, because parks should be as common as shops in a city. For example, when you feel burned out from work or studying, visiting a nearby park helps you relax and refresh your mind.

Suggestion: Organize the answer: start with a direct statement, then give one specific example. Remove repetition and correct grammar (e.g., “I saw many green spaces on websites” and “there is a famous national park in Paris known for its trees”). Use linking words like “for example” and avoid plural/singular mistakes.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit many parks in the future. For example, I have seen photos online of a famous national park near Paris that is known for its large green spaces and diverse trees, and I would love to visit it.

× When I was a child I was obsessed going to parks and doing picnics here with my family and my best friends.

✓ When I was a child I was obsessed with going to parks and having picnics here with my family and my best friends.

The verb 'obsessed' requires the preposition 'with' followed by a noun or gerund phrase ('with going'); also 'doing picnics' is unnatural — use 'having picnics' or 'going on picnics.' Suggestion: use 'obsessed with' + gerund and prefer collocations like 'have a picnic'.

× As I remember also park was small still it has different kind of flowers, trees and bicycles.

✓ As I remember, the park was small, but it still had different kinds of flowers and trees.

Missing article 'the' before 'park' and wrong tense/agreement issues: 'was' (past) should pair with 'had' not 'has.' Also 'different kind of' should be plural 'different kinds of.' 'Bicycles' is odd in this list unless intended; remove if irrelevant. Suggestion: use articles and match verb tense and noun number.

× Yes I do, but unfortunately the main our National Park of my town was umm knocked down to make way for playground.

✓ Yes I do, but unfortunately our town's main national park was knocked down to make way for a playground.

Incorrect article and word order: use possessive 'our town's' or 'the main national park of my town' and lowercase 'national park' unless it's a proper name. 'Make way for playground' needs an article 'a playground.' Suggestion: reorder to 'our town's main national park' and include 'a' before 'playground.'

× So if I had a chance to visit the parks I would definitely visit it.

✓ So if I had the chance to visit the park, I would definitely visit it.

Conditional structure: use 'had the chance' (idiomatic) and keep number consistent: earlier referred to 'park' singular, so use 'the park' and 'visit it.' Alternatively use plural consistently: 'visit the parks' and 'visit them.' Suggestion: keep noun number consistent and use 'had the chance.'

× Yes I would because I believe that pack should be as an general park, as phones.

✓ Yes I would because I believe that parks should be general public spaces, like public squares.

'Pack' is a misspelling of 'park.' 'as an general park, as phones' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'An' before a consonant sound is wrong; 'general park' is unclear. Suggest replacing with 'parks should be general public spaces.' Clarify meaning and use correct quantifiers/articles.

× Umm, and when you are burned out from works and from studies, uh, it's the best way to visit and refresh your brain.

✓ Umm, and when you are burned out from work and study, it's the best way to visit and refresh your mind.

Use uncountable nouns 'work' and 'study' rather than plural 'works'/'studies' in this context. 'Refresh your brain' is better as 'refresh your mind.' Also 'from work and study' or 'from work and studying.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions and uncountable forms.

× Yes, there are so many parks that I'd like to visit in the future and the I saw so many green spaces in the websites and the from my perspective in Paris there is a well known and National Park for its green space and the diversity of trees.

✓ Yes, there are so many parks that I'd like to visit in the future. I have seen many green spaces on websites, and from my perspective, in Paris there is a well-known national park known for its green space and diversity of trees.

Tense and article problems: use present perfect 'I have seen' to refer to experiences viewed on websites. Remove extra 'the' occurrences. 'well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' as a compound adjective before a noun. 'National Park' should be lowercase unless it's a proper name. Ensure sentence breaks for clarity. Suggestion: split into two sentences and correct articles and tense.

× They'd like to visit it.

✓ I'd like to visit it.

Pronoun 'They' incorrectly refers back to the speaker; use 'I' to show the speaker's desire. 'They'd' (they would) is wrong in this context. Suggestion: use consistent subject pronoun matching the speaker.