Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Mejora la precisión gramatical y fluidez: usa tiempo pasado correcto (I went, I was), elimina muletillas (uh, I, sorry) y repeticiones (loads and loads, the the). Mantén la respuesta directa con 2–3 oraciones y añade un detalle específico (por ejemplo, una actividad concreta o un recuerdo breve) usando conectores simples.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go there with my friends and we always played on the slides and had picnics, which was my favorite part because we could spend the whole afternoon together.

Suggestion: Clarifica la idea y corrige la elección de palabras: evita expresiones confusas como "let myself get distracted as much" y "stomach the idea" si no coinciden con lo que quieres decir. Usa un tema claro, una razón concreta y un conector para coherencia. Mantén 2–3 oraciones sin muletillas.

Example: Not as much as before, because I have more work and responsibilities now. Therefore I rarely have time for long visits, but I still enjoy short walks in a nearby park when I can.

Suggestion: Corrige errores y mejora coherencia: evita frases incorrectas como "both build more parks" y divide las ideas en oraciones fluidas. Usa conectores (for example, because) y añade una razón específica o ejemplo local. Limita la respuesta a máximo 3–4 oraciones.

Example: Yes, I think we need more parks in my city because there are many children and not enough play areas. For example, families often have to travel far to find a safe playground, so more local parks would be very helpful.

Suggestion: Sé preciso y apropiado en vocabulario: evita palabras inapropiadas como "coupon" (usa "attraction" or "destination") y repeticiones. Da una razón específica por la que quieres volver y usa un conector para enlazar la idea. Mantén 2–3 oraciones claras.

Example: If I had to choose, I would love to visit Disneyland again because I went as a child but hardly remember it. It is a popular attraction for all ages, and I would enjoy experiencing the shows and rides as an adult.

× Well, when I was a child I was over the moon when I gone to parks with my friends.

✓ Well, when I was a child I was over the moon when I went to parks with my friends.

The verb 'gone' is the past participle form and requires an auxiliary (have/has/had) to form the perfect tense. The sentence is describing a simple past action, so the simple past form 'went' should be used. To improve, choose the correct past form for completed actions in the past without an auxiliary: 'went'.

× I, I used to have uh, loads and loads of fun when uh, sliding down the the slide.

✓ I used to have loads and loads of fun sliding down the slide.

After expressions like 'have fun' or 'used to' we use the gerund (verb+ing) without an extra 'when' before it. The phrase 'when sliding' is unnecessary and the article 'the' was duplicated. For clarity, remove filler 'uh' and extra words: 'have fun sliding down the slide'.

× Not as much as when I was little, because now I have more responsibilities and I can, uh, let myself get distracted as much as in the past.

✓ Not as much as when I was little, because now I have more responsibilities and I can't let myself get distracted as much as in the past.

The sentence contrasts present inability with past behavior, so the negative modal 'can't' (cannot) should be used rather than 'can' to express inability. Using 'can' creates a contradiction. Remove filler and ensure the modal matches intended meaning: 'I can't let myself get distracted'.

× Well I think some kids will be in cloud 9 if they both build more parks. In my city.

✓ Well, I think some kids would be on cloud nine if the city built more parks.

The original mixes future 'will' with conditional context and uses 'both' incorrectly. For hypothetical/unreal situations, use 'would' with a past form in the if-clause: 'would be ... if the city built'. Also idiom is 'on cloud nine', not 'in cloud 9'. Combine fragments into one sentence for clarity.

× I I went as a child but I don't really remember anything.

✓ I went as a child, but I don't really remember anything.

Duplicate 'I' and missing comma cause minor errors. Remove the repeated pronoun and add a comma before 'but' to join two independent clauses. The tense usage is correct (past experience + present result).

× Moreover, it's a coupon for all range of age.

✓ Moreover, it's suitable for all ages.

The phrase 'a coupon for all range of age' is ungrammatical. Use an adjective phrase like 'suitable for all ages' or 'for people of all ages'. 'All ages' is the correct plural noun phrase to express the intended meaning.