Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (past tense and plural forms), reduce filler words, make the answer more natural and concise, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one supporting example with a linking word.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family when I was a child. For example, we often had picnics under big trees and played games like tag and frisbee, which made those afternoons very memorable.

Suggestion: Correct grammar (‘parks’, ‘quite busy’, ‘on weekends’), remove hesitations and unclear words, use a linking word to connect ideas, and give one specific activity you do there to enrich content.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I’m quite busy now so I usually visit on weekends. For instance, I like taking a short walk and sitting by the pond to relax and breathe fresh air.

Suggestion: Remove fillers and use clearer vocabulary (‘definitely’, ‘parks’, ‘stress’). Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons or benefits, linked clearly.

Example: Yes, definitely. If there were more parks in my city, residents would have convenient green spaces to unwind and exercise, which would help reduce stress and improve community health.

Suggestion: Be concise and natural: state your current priority clearly, then offer a brief conditional future plan using a linking word. Avoid filler words and repeat ideas.

Example: Not at the moment, because I’m focusing on personal and career goals, but if I have more free time in the future I would like to visit local parks to relax and recharge.

× Yes, when I was young I really love going to park with my family because in the park we have a green space to have a picnic on, pointing and gathering activities.

✓ Yes, when I was young I really loved going to the park with my family because the park had green spaces for picnics, playing games and social gatherings.

The sentence mixes past context 'when I was young' with present-tense verb 'love'; use past tense 'loved' to match time. 'going to park' needs article 'the park' for a specific place. 'we have' should be past 'had' to match context. 'to have a picnic on' is awkward; use 'for picnics'. 'pointing and gathering activities' is unclear and likely intended 'playing games and social gatherings'; replace with clearer nouns. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and use appropriate articles and clearer nouns.

× Yes, I still like going to park, however I quite busy nowadays so I just go there on the weekend to stay, affect uh and breathe in a fresh air.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park; however, I am quite busy nowadays so I only go there on the weekend to relax and breathe in fresh air.

'going to park' needs article 'the park'. 'I quite busy' is missing the verb 'am' — use present tense 'I am quite busy'. 'just' better as 'only' for frequency. 'to stay, affect uh' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'to relax' ('stay' and 'affect' inappropriate). 'breathe in a fresh air' should be 'breathe in fresh air' (no article before uncountable 'air'). Maintain present simple and correct verb forms.

× Yes, Defi, definitely uh, if uh, there are more park in my city, residents will have a green space to unwind, get some press and relax.

✓ Yes, definitely; if there were more parks in my city, residents would have green spaces to unwind, relieve stress and relax.

'there are more park' has plural mismatch: 'park' should be 'parks' and conditional requires subjunctive/conditional: use 'if there were' for hypothetical situations and 'would' instead of 'will'. 'have a green space' better as plural 'green spaces' to match 'parks'. 'get some press' is incorrect word choice; likely 'relieve stress' or 'get some rest'. Use clear collocations. Ensure subject-verb agreement and appropriate conditional tense.

× No, not really, because I have a lot of personal and career goals at the moment. So, uh, I don't have enough time to think about parks. However, if I have time I will consider it.

✓ No, not really, because I have a lot of personal and career goals at the moment, so I don't have enough time to think about parks. However, if I have time I will consider visiting them.

Sentence structure mostly correct; minor improvements: combine sentences with comma for smoother flow. 'consider it' is vague; 'consider visiting them' clarifies the object (parks). Tenses are consistent (present simple and future 'will consider') which fit the context. Suggest using clearer references and smoother sentence linking.