Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn, tránh sử dụng cụm từ lộn xộn (ví dụ "Define nicely") và giảm các từ dừng (uh). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason), sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể liên quan đến trải nghiệm cá nhân (ví dụ trò chơi, bạn bè, hoạt động). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (for example, because, and). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were great places to play and meet friends. For example, I used to play hide-and-seek with my neighbors and ride my bike around the paths. Those visits helped me stay active and social.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tốt vì có chủ đề rõ ràng và lý do, nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi như "keen on going to park" (thiếu mạo từ) và "makes me can't manage time". Dùng 2–3 câu: khẳng định, nguyên nhân, thói quen cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ (however, but, so) hợp lý.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but my busy schedule during weekdays makes it difficult. However, I usually visit a park on weekends to relax and exercise. This routine helps me unwind after a long week.

Suggestion: Tránh các cảm thán không cần thiết như "Oh God" và giảm các tiếng ngắt quãng. Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng: Yes/No + lý do; sau đó nêu 1–2 lợi ích cụ thể (exercise, relaxation, environment). Chú ý ngữ pháp: "become an ideal city","parks also provide green space". Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they encourage exercise and provide green space in the city. More parks would improve residents' health and make the city more attractive.

Suggestion: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi như "certainly park" (should be "a specific park") và "look like" -> "look" hoặc "are like". Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu mục tiêu cụ thể (ví dụ muốn thấy kiểu công viên nào, hoạt động nào). Có thể thêm 1 ví dụ về quốc gia hoặc hoạt động để cụ thể hóa.

Example: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit parks abroad to see how they differ from those at home. For example, I would love to visit Japanese gardens to observe their design and how people relax there.

× Define nicely. Yes, I think not only me but also the tribe all over the world could know the parks again, uh, provide green space for child and they can make new friends in the park and do a lot of activities.

✓ Please define 'nicely'. Yes, I think not only I but people all over the world could appreciate parks again; they provide green space for children, and they can make new friends in the park and do a lot of activities.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and awkward phrasing. 'Not only me but also the tribe all over the world' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'not only I but people all over the world' for parallel pronouns. 'Provide green space for child' needs plural 'children'. Also break the run-on sentence with appropriate punctuation and conjunctions. Suggestion: keep pronouns parallel, use plural nouns when appropriate, and simplify complex clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes, definitely. Now I still keen on going to park but the hectic schedule uh, makes me can't manage time to go to the park.

✓ Yes, definitely. Now I am still keen on going to the park, but the hectic schedule means I can't manage my time to go to the park.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for linking verb and incorrect verb agreement 'makes me can't' is ungrammatical. Use 'means I can't' or 'makes it impossible for me to'. Also include the article 'the park' and possessive 'my time'. Suggestion: include appropriate auxiliary verbs, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct object/pronoun forms. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× But in the weekend I usually spend time going to the park.

✓ But at the weekend I usually spend time going to the park.

In some varieties of English 'at the weekend' is preferred; if using American English, 'on the weekend' is more common. 'In the weekend' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'at the weekend' (British) or 'on the weekend' (American) to be grammatical. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Oh God, I think it can, uh, become a ideal city with a lot of parks because, uh, parks can be a place for people to play and to exercise.

✓ Oh God, I think it could become an ideal city with a lot of parks because parks can be places for people to play and exercise.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an ideal'. Singular 'a place' is acceptable but 'parks can be places' is more natural when referring to parks in general. Also 'can' vs 'could' depends on tone; 'could' is slightly more polite. Suggestion: use correct article before vowel sounds and match singular/plural nouns consistently. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Uh, not only that, it also provide green space for the city.

✓ Not only that, it also provides green space for the city.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'provides' (third-person singular). The original used base form 'provide'. Suggestion: conjugate verbs to match the subject (he/she/it + -s in present simple). Grammar problem type ID: 2

× I don't have a certainly park where I want to go, but I want to travel abroad to see how the parks in the other country look like and what the people do in their park.

✓ I don't have a specific park I want to visit, but I want to travel abroad to see what parks in other countries look like and what people do in their parks.

'Certainly park' is incorrect; use 'a specific park' or 'a particular park'. 'How the parks in the other country look like' is ungrammatical: use 'what parks in other countries look like'. Also maintain plural agreement 'their parks' and avoid 'look like' after 'how'—use 'what ... look like'. Suggestion: choose correct adjectives (specific/particular), use correct question-word constructions (what ... look like), and keep noun number consistent. Grammar problem type ID: 4