Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatical and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and correct tense and article errors (e.g., “I liked going to parks” not “I like going parks”). Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my brother and sister, and we spent hours on the swings and slides, which helped me make close friends in the neighbourhood.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word. Use complete sentences and correct register (avoid contractions in IELTS). Be specific about how often you go or what prevents you from going.

Example: Not as much as before, because I am busy with college work and extracurricular activities. For example, I usually spend evenings studying or rehearsing for the drama club, so I rarely visit parks during the week.

Suggestion: This answer is clear and relevant but can be improved with slightly more varied vocabulary and one linking word to show contrast or emphasis. Keep sentences concise (max 5) and give one specific example of how parks benefit the community.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would benefit everyone: for instance, older people could take daily walks to stay active, while families could use safe play areas for children, which would improve both physical health and mental well-being.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement about a specific park or type of park you want to visit, then give concrete reasons. Use linking words and avoid repeating the same idea. Mention when or with whom you might go to add detail.

Example: Yes, I hope to visit the new riverside park that opened recently, especially on weekends. I plan to go there with friends to relax, have a picnic and take long walks to improve my mental health.

× Yes I like going parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The question asked about childhood (past), so the verb should be in the past tense. Also the verb 'like' should be 'liked' to agree with 'as a child'. Additionally, the preposition 'to' is required after 'going' when followed by a noun ('going to parks'). Suggestion: use past tense 'liked' and include 'to' - 'I liked going to parks.'

× When I was a young I used to go with my brother or my sister and play on swings, slides and I used to get along with my other friends so we can be a good make a good friendship.

✓ When I was young, I used to go with my brother or sister and play on the swings and slides. I used to get along with my friends, so we could build good friendships.

'Omit the article 'a' before 'young' — the correct phrase is 'when I was young.' Use 'brother or sister' without 'my' repetition. Plural 'swings' and 'slides' are fine but include 'the' for specific playground equipment: 'the swings and slides.' 'Can be a good make a good friendship' is ungrammatical: use 'could build good friendships' to show past ability and correct noun usage. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× Depends because I get busy with my college work and other Co curricular activities I fancy.

✓ It depends because I get busy with my college work and other co-curricular activities I enjoy.

Start with 'It depends' as a full clause. 'Co curricular' should be hyphenated 'co-curricular' and lowercase. 'I fancy' is awkward in this context; 'I enjoy' is more natural. Tense present simple 'get busy' is appropriate for current habits.

× Don't like going to parks that much.

✓ I don't like going to parks that much.

This sentence lacks an explicit subject. Add 'I' to form a complete sentence. Contraction 'Don't' needs the subject: 'I don't'. The rest is correct for present preference.

× It's good to have more parks in the city because older people often enjoy going to parks for a walk or make some time with friends.

✓ It's good to have more parks in the city because older people often enjoy going for a walk or spending time with friends.

Use the phrase 'going for a walk' (preposition 'for') rather than 'going to parks for a walk'. Use parallel structure: 'going for a walk or spending time with friends.' 'Make some time with friends' is incorrect; 'spend time with friends' is the correct collocation.

× Parks are also great for young children and families to relax, which improves people's physical and mental well-being.

✓ Parks are also great places for young children and families to relax, which improves people's physical and mental well-being.

Add 'places' after 'great' to make the noun phrase complete: 'great places for... to relax.' The rest is correct; the relative clause 'which improves...' correctly refers to relaxing in parks and uses 'people's' appropriately.

× Yes, I would like to go to parks in the future, maybe to relax or to enjoy time with friends.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to parks in the future, maybe to relax or enjoy time with friends.

Remove the extra 'to' before 'enjoy' to keep parallel infinitive forms: 'to relax or enjoy.' The sentence is future-intentional and 'would like to' is appropriate.

× And to take a walk for mental health and well-being.

✓ I might also take walks for my mental health and well-being.

Sentence fragment starting with 'And' and lacking subject/verb should be revised into a full sentence. Use plural 'take walks' or 'go for a walk' and include possessive 'my' to clarify whose mental health. 'Might also' fits the tentative future intention.