Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (since this is about childhood), avoid filler words, fix verb forms and vocabulary (e.g. "used to play", "picnics"). Give one or two specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g. "For example").

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play tag with my friends and have family picnics on weekends, which made those visits joyful and memorable.

Suggestion: Reduce fillers, use correct articles and plural/singular forms, and keep tense consistent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example using a linking phrase. Correct phrases like "I can relate there" to "I can relax there" and "helped me forget about study" to "helps me forget about my studies."

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, I often go there for a short walk or to sit and relax on weekends, which helps me forget about my studies.

Suggestion: Clarify your reasoning and correct grammar: use plural "parks", avoid unclear phrases ("I am relaxing"), and correct vocabulary (not "disease pub"). Explain benefits clearly and give a realistic example with linking words. Keep sentences concise and directly related to the question.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they encourage people to be active and provide places to relax. For instance, I usually walk or jog in a nearby park, and more parks would mean I could exercise closer to home.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid repetition (don't repeat "beautiful"). Use precise time references (e.g. "next year") and correct nouns ("fans" -> "friends"). Start with a clear intention sentence, then give one or two specific activities and a time frame using linking words.

Example: I would like to visit a large national park, especially a mountain park. For example, I hope to go next year with some friends to hike, take photos of the scenery, and spend a weekend exploring the trails.

× I like going to the park as a choice because it's was fun.

✓ I liked going to the park when I was a child because it was fun.

The response refers to past childhood habits, so past tense is required. 'I like' and 'it's was' mix present and past incorrectly. Change to 'I liked' and 'it was'. Also 'as a choice' is unnatural; 'when I was a child' clarifies time.

× I will to play game like tap with my friends and hang out with my family for a picnic, so draw visits were always joyful and memorable.

✓ I used to play games like tag with my friends and hang out with my family for picnics, so those visits were always joyful and memorable.

Multiple errors: 'I will to play' is incorrect modal/infinitive use; past habitual needs 'used to'. 'game' should be plural 'games'. 'tap' likely 'tag'. 'for a picnic' -> 'for picnics'. 'draw visits' is incorrect; 'those visits' is appropriate. This uses correct past habitual construction.

× MMM well yes, umm, I still like going to park now because they are beautiful and I can relate there.

✓ Well, yes, I still like going to the park now because it is beautiful and I can relax there.

'Going to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. 'They are beautiful' incorrectly uses plural pronoun for 'park'; use 'it is'. 'relate' is wrong word; intended 'relax'. Maintain present tense for current habit.

× For example, I often go for a short walk or sit and rest on weekend and it's helped me forget about, uh, study.

✓ For example, I often go for a short walk or sit and rest on weekends and it helps me forget about studying.

Use plural 'weekends' for habitual actions. 'it's helped me' mixes present reference; 'it helps me' is simple present habitual. 'forget about study' needs gerund 'studying'.

× Well yes, I would like to see more park in my city because I am relaxing and have people stay active.

✓ Well yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would be relaxing and would help people stay active.

'more park' needs plural 'parks'. 'I am relaxing' is incorrect meaning; use passive idea 'they would be relaxing' or 'they would provide relaxation'. 'have people stay active' should be 'help people stay active'—use appropriate verb.

× For example, I often go for a walk or jog in the disease pub and if they were more park I could decide closer to home.

✓ For example, I often go for a walk or jog in the nearby park, and if there were more parks I could decide to live closer to home.

'disease pub' is garbled; likely 'nearby park'. 'they were more park' has wrong pronoun and number: use 'if there were more parks'. 'decide closer to home' should be 'decide to live closer to home' for clarity. Use conditional past 'were' for hypothetical.

× Uh, well, I would like to visit a big National Park in the future, like a mountain park.

✓ Uh, well, I would like to visit a big national park in the future, for example a mountain park.

'National Park' does not need capitalization unless it's a specific name; use lowercase 'national park' for a type. 'like' can be replaced with 'for example' for clarity.

× I think it's supposed to be beautiful and the view would be beautiful and I could go hiking and take photos, for example.

✓ I think it would be beautiful and the views would be amazing; I could go hiking and take photos, for example.

'It's supposed to be' is awkward for future desire; 'would be' matches hypothetical/future visit. Repetition of 'beautiful' is redundant; improve word choice and maintain conditional mood.

× I hope to go late years with some fans for a weekend trip.

✓ I hope to go in later years with some friends for a weekend trip.

'late years' is incorrect; use 'in later years' or 'in a few years'. 'fans' is likely wrong; use 'friends'. Use infinitive 'hope to go' is fine but specify time expression correctly.