Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, chính xác về thì và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "hadn't had a chance" không cần thiết; động từ chia không nhất quán: "is/was", "was/ were"). Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: khoảng cách, lý do) và dùng liên từ hợp lý (because, so). Giảm từ thừa và sửa động từ thành quá khứ khi nói về quá khứ.

Example: Yes, not really. When I was a child I seldom went to parks because the nearest park was too far from our house and my parents were always busy with work. As a result, I mostly stayed at home and played with my siblings.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều từ nói đệm (like, I mean, anyway) nên lược bỏ. Sắp xếp câu mạch lạc: đưa câu chủ đề, rồi nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Dùng liên từ (because, so) để kết nối ý và dùng từ vựng chính xác (spend time, hang out, go for a walk). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

Example: Yes, I do. I often go to parks with my best friend because we enjoy walking and talking there. For example, last weekend we spent two hours walking around the lake and chatting about our plans.

Suggestion: Cần tránh lặp lại và sửa ngữ pháp: chia thì phù hợp (past vs present), sửa cấu trúc 'surrounded my home' thành 'around my home' và xóa từ trùng ('which which'). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes, I would), nêu lý do cụ thể và một hậu quả hoặc mong muốn ngắn gọn. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (convenient, nearby).

Example: Yes, I would. I want more parks near my neighbourhood because the existing ones are too far away. If there were more parks around my home, it would be much more convenient for me to go for a walk regularly.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều ngập ngừng và lỗi từ vựng ("luggage parks" không đúng). Cần nêu tên hoặc miêu tả công viên cụ thể, lý do muốn đến và kế hoạch ngắn gọn. Tránh từ ngữ không trang trọng như 'gossip' trong bài thi; dùng 'chat' hoặc 'catch up'. Giữ câu súc tích, động từ chia đúng thì và hạn chế tiếng ừ ừ.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the parks in District 1, such as [park name], because they are famous for their scenic gardens and river views. I hope to go there with my family one day so we can walk together and catch up.

× To be honest, when I was a child, I hadn't had a chance to go to the park because the park is really was really far from my house and my parents was really busy at that time because they had to go to work.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child, I did not have a chance to go to the park because the park was really far from my house and my parents were really busy at that time because they had to go to work.

The sentence mixes past perfect ('hadn't had') and present forms incorrectly. Use simple past 'did not have' to describe a general past state. Also 'was really far' is correct in past and 'my parents were' is needed for plural subject-verb agreement. Suggest using consistent past tense and correct subject-verb agreement. Use simple past for habitual or general past situations (did not have, was, were).

× So I always stay at home instead of going to the park.

✓ So I always stayed at home instead of going to the park.

The sentence refers to a habitual action in the past, so use simple past 'stayed' rather than present 'stay'. Maintain tense consistency with preceding past context. When describing past habits, use 'used to' or simple past (I always stayed / I used to stay).

× Yes. I mean like if I have a chance, I really love going to parks now because right now I have my best friend and we mostly spend my free time anyway.

✓ Yes. I mean, if I have a chance, I really love going to parks now because I have my best friend and we mostly spend our free time together.

Mixed person/tense and word choice errors: 'right now I have my best friend' is fine but 'we mostly spend my free time' uses incorrect possessive; should be 'our free time'. Also add 'together' for clarity. Keep present tense consistent. Ensure pronouns match the subject (our instead of my) and add collocations ('spend time together').

× When we hang out, we always want to go for a walk and then we choose parks for that activity.

✓ When we hang out, we always want to go for a walk, so we choose parks for that activity.

Grammar is mostly correct but 'and then we choose' sounds awkward; use 'so we choose' to show purpose. Keep -ing form 'hang out' and 'go for a walk' correct. Use conjunctions that reflect cause and effect for natural phrasing.

× Yes, of course, as I just told you that I haven't had a chance to go to park because parks really far from my house.

✓ Yes, of course. As I just told you, I did not have a chance to go to the park because parks were really far from my house.

Use simple past 'did not have' for past situation and include article 'the park'. Also 'parks really far' needs past verb 'were' for plural 'parks'. The original had present perfect 'haven't had' which is inconsistent with past context. Use correct article 'the' with singular noun and past tense 'were' for plural.

× So I wish that they would have more parks surrounded my home which which make me convenient for me to go for a walk.

✓ So I wish that they would build more parks around my home, which would make it convenient for me to go for a walk.

Incorrect verb choice and preposition: 'surrounded my home' is wrong; use 'around my home'. 'Would have more parks' is awkward; 'would build more parks' or 'there would be more parks' is better. Also ensure relative clause uses correct verb form 'would make it convenient'. Use 'around' to indicate location and rephrase to a natural causative structure ('which would make it convenient').

× Yes, I think that the parks at District 1 is umm in my Viet in VI VI Vietnam is the luggage parks ever.

✓ Yes, I think that the parks in District 1 in Vietnam are the best parks ever.

Multiple issues: use 'in District 1' and 'in Vietnam' (not 'my Viet'), plural subject 'parks' needs plural verb 'are'. 'Luggage parks' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'best parks'. Replace with appropriate adjective. Remove filler 'umm' in formal answer. Ensure correct prepositions for locations ('in District 1', 'in Vietnam') and subject-verb agreement ('parks are').

× So I really want to go in the in the future with my family.

✓ So I really want to go there in the future with my family.

Redundant 'in the in the' and missing object 'there'. Use 'in the future' for time and include location pronoun 'there' to indicate the parks. Avoid repetition and include necessary locative pronoun ('there').

× I love my family gathering here and talk about gossip.

✓ I love having family gatherings there and talking about gossip.

Use gerund forms 'having' and 'talking' to express enjoyment of activities. 'family gathering' should be pluralized as 'family gatherings' for habitual events. Also 'here' changed to 'there' to match previous location reference. Use '-ing' verb forms after 'love' and pluralize nouns for repeated events.