Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and add a brief reason or memory. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the tense/wording, and include one specific supporting detail with a linking word.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which made those visits very memorable.

Suggestion: Work on conciseness and natural linking. Combine ideas into one coherent answer, correct minor phrasing issues, and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to connect reason and consequence.

Example: Yes, I still like going to parks; however, because I am very busy with work, I rarely have time to visit. If I do have a free afternoon, I usually go there to relax and get some fresh air.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid vague adjectives. Give one clear reason and use a linking word to connect cause and effect. Replace 'aesthetic' with a more natural descriptor and tighten the sentence.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks provide green space for relaxation. For instance, additional small neighborhood parks would allow people to enjoy fresh air and exercise close to home.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and give more precise reasons. Name the park naturally, provide one specific detail about what attracts you, and use a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Lipo Chicaran Central Park in the near future because it has beautiful lakes and walking trails. I am especially keen to see the flower gardens and take photographs of the scenery.

× Yes, I liked going to parks when I was still child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was still a child.

The noun 'child' requires the indefinite article 'a' when referring to being a child in general. Without the article the phrase is ungrammatical. Use 'a child' for singular countable nouns in this context.

× Of course I do, but since I am very busy with my work, I have no time to go there often. But if I have the time, I will go there as soon as possible.

✓ Of course I do, but since I am very busy with my work, I do not have time to go there often. If I have the time, I will go there as soon as possible.

The contraction 'have no time' is acceptable but sounds informal; more important is consistency of present simple with habitual situation: 'I do not have time' is clearer. Also avoid starting a sentence with 'But' after a full stop; combine clauses or remove the second 'But' to improve formality and flow.

× Of course I would, since in my city there are many aesthetic parks, so I want to go there to have some fresh air.

✓ Of course I would, since there are many attractive parks in my city, so I would like to visit them to get some fresh air.

The adjective 'aesthetic' is awkward here; 'attractive' fits better. The sentence mixes conjunctions and modal verbs awkwardly: use 'so I would like to visit them' to match the conditional/ polite tone. Also 'in my city' is better placed after 'parks' or omitted for concision.

× Yes, there are. It is specifically in Lipo Chicaran Central Park. I want to go there soon because the scenery is very attractive and beautiful. I want to go there.

✓ Yes, there are. Specifically, I want to visit Lipo Chicaran Central Park. I want to go there soon because the scenery is very attractive.

'It is specifically in Lipo Chicaran Central Park' is unclear and uses an impersonal 'it' incorrectly. Replace with a clear subject: 'I want to visit Lipo Chicaran Central Park.' Avoid repeating 'I want to go there' twice; remove redundancy. Also 'attractive and beautiful' is repetitive; choose one adjective.