Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "memories" twice) and cut the trailing incomplete phrase.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were places where my family would picnic and play games. For example, I remember learning to ride a bike on a wide park path, which makes those outings very special to me.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, then explain frequency with clearer linking words and correct tense. Remove filler words like "uh" and avoid incomplete phrases. Use one or two specific examples of activities you do there.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I cannot visit them every day because of work. However, I try to go once or twice a week to walk, read, or exercise, which helps me relax after a busy day.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give a clear reason using linking words. Use correct grammar (avoid repeated words like "constructs constructed") and provide one specific consequence or example to strengthen your point.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks because many green spaces have been replaced by buildings. For instance, several small playgrounds near my home were turned into apartment blocks, so new parks would improve air quality and give residents places to relax.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, then add two specific facts or reasons with linking words. Remove fillers and correct word choice (e.g., "animals" rather than "animals, creatures"). Mention what you want to see or do there to be more vivid.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Kanha National Park in Madhya Pradesh because it is famous for its tigers and beautiful sal forests. I hope to go on a wildlife safari there to see animals like tigers and deer and to photograph the scenery.

× Yes, I used to like going to the park as a child.

✓ Yes, I used to like going to the park when I was a child.

The original sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with 'as a child'; while not strictly wrong, 'when I was a child' is more natural and clearly locates the habit in the past. Use consistent past-time phrasing.

× It connects me to the very good memories and I feel very nostalgic when I remember those memories.

✓ It connects me to very good memories and I feel very nostalgic when I remember them.

Using 'the' and repeating 'those memories' is redundant. Replace 'the very good memories' with 'very good memories' and use the pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition and improve cohesion.

× Although I.

✓ (Remove fragment)

'Although I.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. Either complete the thought (e.g., 'Although I did not always go, I enjoyed it.') or remove the fragment.

× Yes definitely, I still like going to the park now, although due to my work I couldn't make it to the park daily.

✓ Yes, definitely. I still like going to the park now, but due to my work I cannot make it to the park daily.

The sentence mixes present preference with past tense 'couldn't.' Since the speaker refers to a current inability caused by ongoing work, use present 'cannot' (or 'can't'). Also add punctuation and conjunction 'but' for clarity.

× Uh but in my spare time I do sometime try to go to the park and enjoy my free.

✓ But in my spare time I sometimes try to go to the park and enjoy my free time.

Use 'sometimes' instead of 'sometime' to indicate occasional action. 'Do' is unnecessary; remove it. 'Enjoy my free' is incomplete—use 'free time.' Also remove filler 'Uh' for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. Because as you can see, there's are the lot of building and apartments are constructs constructed at the place of parks and lot of parks have been removed or diminished.

✓ Yes, definitely. As you can see, there are a lot of buildings and apartments constructed where parks used to be, and many parks have been removed or diminished.

Problems: 'there's are' is ungrammatical—use 'there are.' Use plural 'buildings.' 'are constructs constructed' is redundant; use 'constructed.' Use 'where parks used to be' for clarity. Replace 'lot of parks' with 'many parks.' Remove leading 'Because' which fragments the sentence.

× Uh, and I am eager to see more parks in my locality and this city.

✓ I am eager to see more parks in my locality and in this city.

Remove filler 'Uh.' Add preposition 'in' before 'this city' for parallel structure and clarity.

× Yes, I would love to go or visit Kana National Park, uh, one day.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit Kanha National Park one day.

Use 'visit' alone (no need for 'go or visit'). Correct park name to 'Kanha' (common spelling). Remove 'uh' and place 'one day' at end without commas. 'Would love to' correctly expresses future desire.

× It is situated in Madhya Pradesh and uh, this, that place is so beautiful and there is a lot of animals, creatures in this park and I love to visit them once in my life.

✓ It is situated in Madhya Pradesh. That place is very beautiful and there are many animals and creatures in this park, and I would love to visit it once in my life.

Replace 'uh, this, that place' with 'That place.' Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality. 'There is a lot of animals' is incorrect—use 'there are many animals.' 'Visit them' is wrong because animals are not the implied direct object; use 'visit it' (the park) or 'see them' for animals. Use 'would love to' for desired future experience.