Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more specific, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when, who, what you did) using linking words. Also correct tense and quantifiers (e.g., “twice a month”).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My dad usually took me there twice a month, and we often fed the ducks and played on the swings, which were my favorite activities.

Suggestion: Make a direct, grammatical topic sentence. Use linking words to compare city and outskirts parks, and be specific about why you prefer one (e.g., cleaner paths, more trees, facilities). Fix grammar and repetition.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks, especially those in central Bangkok, because they tend to be cleaner and have more facilities. In contrast, parks in the outskirts are often less well maintained and have fewer paths for walking.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct verb forms. Use linking words to explain why you want more parks and give a clear, specific example of a park you like, including exact features (trees, size, activities). Avoid trailing off.

Example: Definitely — I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space and places to exercise. For example, the park near the train market in Chatuchak district is large, has many trees, and offers walking paths and picnic areas, which I really enjoy.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence stating the park and location. Correct grammar and word choice (city vs country). Give specific reasons why you want to visit and a brief plan or timeline. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because I've seen photos of its wide lawns and cultural events. I am saving money now and hope to go within the next two years to explore the park's trails and landmarks.

× Yes I did, I really enjoyed going to a park when I was a kid. My dad usually took me like 2 * a month even though that's just a little amount of time.

✓ Yes, I did. I really enjoyed going to parks when I was a kid. My dad usually took me about twice a month, even though that was only for a short time.

The original contains inconsistent plurality and awkward time expressions. 'Going to a park' is acceptable, but 'going to parks' is more natural when speaking generally about repeated visits. 'Like 2 * a month' is informal and unclear; replace with 'about twice a month'. Use past tense consistently: 'that was only for a short time.' Suggestions: use clear time adverbs (twice a month, once a week) and maintain past tense for past habits.

× Of course I still like going to a park, especially when I'm going into a city because they park in the city of Bangkok.

✓ Of course I still like going to parks, especially when I go into the city because the parks in Bangkok are nicer.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and plurality. Use simple present 'I go' for habitual actions rather than 'I'm going' if referring generally. 'They park in the city of Bangkok' is ungrammatical: replace with 'the parks in Bangkok'. Maintain plural for general reference and correct verb agreement.

× It you is usually better than in the out outskirt of Bangkok because I live in the outskirts of Bangkok area which.

✓ They are usually better than the parks in the outskirts of Bangkok, because I live in the outskirts of the city.

This fragment has wrong pronouns ('It you'), incorrect verb agreement, repetition ('out outskirt'), and an incomplete clause ('which'). Reconstruct the sentence: refer to 'parks' with 'they', use 'are' for present plural, and finish the thought. Keep 'outskirts' plural and include a clear reason clause.

× Definitely, I tried to went to different park when I have a chance.

✓ Definitely. I try to go to different parks when I have the chance.

Mixes past and present incorrectly. 'Tried to went' is wrong: use base form after 'tried to' ('tried to go') if past, but context asks about general preference so use present habitual 'I try to go'. Also pluralize 'parks' for general visits and use 'the chance' or 'a chance' appropriately.

× The one that I'm fond of the most is the Swanton train. Train market is near train Market in Jaduca district, which is a very big park and have a lot of trees and.

✓ The one I like the most is Swanton Train Market. The market is in the Jaduca district near a very large park that has a lot of trees.

Original has capitalization and punctuation issues and wrong prepositions/word order. Use 'near' correctly ('near a very large park'). Change 'have a lot of trees' to 'has a lot of trees' to match singular 'park'. Remove redundant words and complete the sentence.

× Is this I really want to go to Central Park New York which is my favorite country sorry in my favorite city.

✓ Yes, I really want to go to Central Park in New York, which is in my favorite city.

This sentence is disfluent and confused ('Is this', 'favorite country sorry'). Reconstruct to clear meaning: express desire 'I really want to go to Central Park in New York' and clarify that New York is the speaker's favorite city. Use correct preposition 'in' for 'Central Park in New York'.

× I really looking forward to in the near future. I try save up money for it actually.

✓ I'm really looking forward to it in the near future. I'm trying to save up money for it, actually.

After 'looking forward to' a noun or gerund is required; include 'it' or a gerund phrase. Use present continuous 'I'm really looking forward' and 'I'm trying' for ongoing future preparation. Add preposition 'to' correctly and use comma for 'actually' if desired.