Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and add a specific detail or memory. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and tense errors.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, once a week my family and I would travel to a nearby park where I loved feeding ducks and playing on the swings, which made those visits very memorable.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to organize supporting details. Be specific about activities and frequency, and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., 'when I'm bored or stressed'). Keep to 3–4 sentences maximum.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks whenever I have free time. For instance, when I'm stressed I often go to a park to play football with friends, and sometimes I teach my younger brothers how to play cricket, which helps me relax and bond with them.

Suggestion: Give a concise direct answer and then explain clearly why more parks are needed, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid filler words (uh) and be specific about the facilities you want and the benefits for the community.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my village because many areas lack recreational spaces. For example, a new park in the poorer neighborhood with benches, a playground and walking paths would give children a safe place to play and help families exercise and socialise.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear statement naming the park you want to visit, then give specific reasons and a brief context. Correct tense and phrasing errors and avoid hesitations. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit City Park in Kota. When I visited Gota last year I saw the large park from outside but couldn't enter because of limited time; I want to return to enjoy its gardens and relax there.

× Yeah, as a child I like to go to park and even there is no park at our locality.

✓ Yeah, as a child I liked to go to the park, and there was no park in our locality.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past context 'as a child'; use past tense 'liked'. Also 'go to park' needs the definite article 'the park' and 'at our locality' should be 'in our locality'. Use consistent past tense for past events. Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood activities and correct articles and prepositions: 'I liked to go to the park' and 'in our locality'.

× I went to a park in nearby locality.

✓ I went to a park in a nearby locality.

Missing article 'a' before 'nearby locality' and 'nearby locality' sounds odd; include the indefinite article. Also 'nearby locality' could be improved to 'a nearby area' for natural English. Suggestion: Add the article: 'in a nearby locality' or 'in a nearby area'.

× Yeah, when I'm free, I'm bored or I'm stressed, I go to parks.

✓ Yeah, when I'm free, bored, or stressed, I go to parks.

Repetition of 'I'm' is unnecessary and makes sentence awkward. Use parallel structure and remove repeated auxiliary verbs when listing states. Tense (present habitual) is correct. Suggestion: Use parallel phrasing: 'when I'm free, bored, or stressed'.

× There I play with my friends or teach my younger brothers how to play some sort of sports that we used to play in my childhood.

✓ There I play with my friends or teach my younger brothers how to play some sports that we used to play in my childhood.

The phrase 'some sort of sports' is ungrammatical; use 'some sports' or 'a sport'. Also 'used to play in my childhood' is acceptable but wordy; maintain consistent plural 'sports'. Suggestion: Use 'some sports' or 'a sport' depending on meaning.

× Uh, as I live in village, there are not many parks, but uh, I want to see one park in the specific, uh, area, the backward area of our village and, uh, as there are no good facilities, so I like to see park there in my village.

✓ Uh, as I live in a village, there are not many parks, but I would like to see a park built in the more remote area of our village because there are not many good facilities there.

Missing article 'a' before 'village' and before 'park'. 'the specific, uh, area, the backward area' is awkward; use 'the more remote area' or 'a specific area'. 'I like to see park there' needs 'a park' and smoother phrasing. Also better modal 'would like' for polite desire. Suggestion: Add necessary articles and improve word choice: 'a village', 'a park', and 'the more remote area'.

× Yeah, last year when I went to Gota to visit the local fortress, there is a very big park named City Park, although entry vises, uh, quite small, but uh, uh, due to lack of time I can't manage to get in the park.

✓ Yeah, last year when I went to Gota to visit the local fortress, there was a very big park called City Park; although the entrance fees were quite small, due to lack of time I couldn't manage to get into the park.

The event took place in the past, so use past tense 'was' instead of 'is'. 'Entry vises' is incorrect; likely 'entry fees' or 'entrance fees'. Use past tense 'were' for 'fees' and 'couldn't' for inability in the past. Use 'get into the park' for entering. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and correct vocabulary: 'there was a very big park called City Park', 'entrance fees were', 'couldn't get into the park'.

× So I will like to visit the City Park of Kota.

✓ So I would like to visit the City Park of Gota.

Use 'would like' (polite desire) instead of 'will like'. Also the city name earlier is Gota not Kota; maintain consistency. If future intention is certain, 'I will visit' could be used, but in polite contexts 'I would like to visit' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'would like' for polite statements of desire and ensure proper noun consistency.