Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, and use correct word order. Add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Focus on natural phrasing and correct verb forms.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I usually went with my mother, and we often fed the ducks or had picnics there, which I really enjoyed.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar for time expressions, and add a brief explanation with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like 'not really like' and use natural collocations (e.g., 'I don't go often' or 'I don't have time').

Example: I don't go to parks very often now because I'm a high school student and I have very little free time. However, I try to visit when I have a break to relax.

Suggestion: Provide a clear, concise reason and use linking words correctly. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'improve air quality', 'promote health') and avoid sentence fragments. Give one specific benefit as supporting detail.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and provide places for people to exercise, which would promote public health.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, correct word choice and grammar, and give a concrete description of the kind of park you'd like to visit. Use linking words to connect ideas and include specific details (types of animals, flora, or activities).

Example: I'm not sure about a specific park, but I'd love to visit a nature reserve with walking trails, native trees, colorful flowers, and small animals like birds and butterflies.

× Yes, I really like like it, Uh, when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I really liked it when I was a child.

The student mixes present and past. The question asks about liking parks as a child (past), so the verb should be in the past tense 'liked' rather than 'like'. Also remove the extra repeated 'like' and filler. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits: 'I really liked it.'

× I usually with my mom, go to the park.

✓ I usually went to the park with my mom.

The word order is incorrect and tense should match the past context. 'Usually' with a past habit takes past simple 'went'. Prepositional phrase 'with my mom' should follow 'went'. Suggestion: 'I usually went to the park with my mom.'

× Not really like because I'm not time now.

✓ Not really, because I don't have time now.

The student uses 'like' incorrectly and mixes negative structure. To express lack of time use 'I don't have time now.' This uses present simple which suits the current situation. Suggestion: 'Not really, because I don't have time now.'

× I'm a high school student so I am studying very hard.

✓ I'm a high school student, so I am studying very hard.

This sentence is grammatically correct but needs a comma before 'so' to join clauses. Tenses (present continuous) are appropriate to describe current ongoing action. Suggestion: include comma for clarity: 'I'm a high school student, so I am studying very hard.'

× Yes, because building parks, uh, first it can. Make air cleaning and, uh, make us healthy.

✓ Yes, building parks can clean the air and make us healthier.

Problems: incorrect word order, unnecessary filler 'it can', incorrect noun 'air cleaning' and adjective 'healthy' needs comparative 'healthier' when comparing states. Use gerund phrase 'building parks' as subject and verbs 'can clean' and 'make' without 'it'. Suggestion: 'Yes, building parks can clean the air and make us healthier.'

× In factly I don't know but I want to allow nature park with animal tree and flowers.

✓ Actually, I don't know, but I would like a natural park with animals, trees, and flowers.

Multiple issues: 'In factly' is incorrect — use 'Actually'. 'I want to allow' is wrong verb choice; use 'I would like' or 'I want'. 'Nature park' should be 'natural park' or 'nature park' but 'natural park' is better; list items need commas and plural nouns 'animals' and 'trees'. Use conditional 'would like' for future desire. Suggestion: 'Actually, I don't know, but I would like a natural park with animals, trees, and flowers.'