Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and restructure into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “for instance” or “especially”). Be specific about activities and feelings to make the answer more vivid.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my school and neighborhood friends, and we would race on the large playground near my home. For example, we held running competitions every weekend, which made those visits very exciting.

Suggestion: Make the response direct and concise: state your main point, then give one brief reason and one example. Eliminate filler words and fix grammar (e.g., “I don’t get much time” not “I really get time”). Use linking words like “because” and “however” correctly.

Example: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I don’t have much time because of my busy schedule. However, whenever I have a free weekend or a vacation, I try to visit a park to relax.

Suggestion: Avoid vague or exaggerated expressions (e.g., “creation of the gods”) and correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms). Give two clear reasons with linking words (for example, “because… and…”). Be specific about benefits (e.g., “reduce stress,” “encourage exercise”).

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they help people relax and reduce stress, and they encourage outdoor exercise and social contact. For example, a nearby park could offer walking paths and playgrounds that benefit families and office workers.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give one or two specific reasons and a brief plan. Correct word order and small grammar issues (e.g., “back home in India,” “it is called”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” appropriately.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit the famous Royal Park in Amritsar, India, because it is known for its beautiful gardens and historic features. If I have the chance, I would spend a few days there enjoying the scenery and meeting local people to learn about the park’s history.

× I used to go to park with my school friends and some friends from the neighborhood.

✓ I used to go to the park with my school friends and some friends from the neighborhood.

The noun 'park' needs the definite article 'the' because the speaker refers to a particular park(s) known in context. Use 'the park' to indicate a specific place rather than the general noun 'park'. Suggestion: Use 'the' before singular, countable places that are familiar or specific (e.g., 'the park', 'the school').

× I still remember the large park, uh, BA large, uh, playground where we tended to, uh, races for the arts and this, uh, the one park which was, uh, near to my home and we used to go there.

✓ I still remember a large playground where we used to have races and the park that was near my home where we used to go.

This sentence is disfluent and contains redundant phrases and incorrect verb forms. 'Tended to races for the arts' is unclear; likely intended 'used to have races'. 'Near to my home' should be 'near my home'. Simplify and use consistent past habitual form 'used to'. Suggestion: Break long thoughts into shorter clauses, use 'used to' for past habitual actions, and prefer 'near my home' over 'near to my home'.

× I still like going to parks, but, uh, I really get time to go to park these days because, uh, I have a busy schedule and that's why, uh, I, I don't have enough time, but whenever I have a vacation or a free weekend, I usually try to.

✓ I still like going to parks, but I don't really get time to go to the park these days because I have a busy schedule. Whenever I have a vacation or a free weekend, I usually try to go.

Two issues: missing article before 'park' ('go to the park') and awkward word order ('I really get time' should be 'I don't really get time'). Also sentence fragments—finish the final verb 'go'. Suggestion: Use 'the park' when referring to going to parks in general as an activity, and keep negative adverb placement close to the verb ('don't really get time'). Ensure sentences end with a verb when needed.

× Yes, I would because the parks are a beautiful creation of the gods and it help to provide, uh, rejuvenate and help people to feel relaxed and get ready for the next week.

✓ Yes, I would because parks are a beautiful creation of nature and they help to provide rejuvenation and help people feel relaxed and get ready for the next week.

Multiple problems: 'the parks are a beautiful creation of the gods' is unnatural—'parks are a beautiful creation of nature' is idiomatic. 'It help' has subject-verb agreement error (should be 'they help'). 'Rejuvenate' should be a noun 'rejuvenation' or 'to rejuvenate' with proper structure; 'help people to feel' can be 'help people feel'. Suggestion: Use plural pronoun 'they' for 'parks', and use nouns where required ('rejuvenation') or correct infinitive forms. Prefer natural collocations like 'creation of nature'.

× And also it connects people to with nature.

✓ And it also connects people with nature.

Both 'to' and 'with' are used together incorrectly. The correct preposition here is 'with' (or 'to'), but not both. Also place 'also' appropriately. Suggestion: Use 'connects people with nature' or 'connects people to nature'. Keep prepositions simple.

× Yes, in my back home India, there was a very popular park that is a royal park which is located in Amritsar.

✓ Yes, back home in India, there was a very popular royal park located in Amritsar.

The phrase 'in my back home India' is incorrect word order; use 'back home in India' or 'in my hometown in India'. 'That is a royal park which is located in Amritsar' is wordy—combine into 'a very popular royal park located in Amritsar'. Suggestion: Use natural word order 'back home in India' and make relative clauses concise.

× So if I get a chance in the future then I yes, definitely I would visit there and enjoy the nature and spend some time with the local people.

✓ So if I get a chance in the future, I would definitely visit there, enjoy the nature, and spend some time with the local people.

The sentence contains unnecessary fillers and incorrect word order. 'I yes, definitely I would' is disfluent—use 'I would definitely'. Also 'visit there' is acceptable but better 'visit it' or 'visit the park'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, place adverb 'definitely' before the main verb, and use a clearer object ('visit the park' or 'visit it').