Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “often” instead of repeating “most of the time”).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often rode my bike there with friends in the evenings, and we played games on the grass. Those visits were a highlight of my childhood because they let me be active and social.

Suggestion: Be more fluent and avoid filler words (uh, you know). Give a clear topic sentence then add specific details with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”). Clarify phrases like “unknown faces” (say “new people” or “neighbors”).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because I’m busy during the day, I usually go in the morning to exercise and meet neighbors, and the fresh air helps me feel refreshed for the day.

Suggestion: Correct small grammar mistakes and use clearer vocabulary (parks plural). Begin with a direct opinion, then give 2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid repeating similar phrases.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because we only have one or two and they are often far from my home. For example, the nearest park is always crowded, so new parks would give people more space to walk and relax.

Suggestion: Avoid contractions like “wanna” in formal speaking, reduce hesitations, and correct vocabulary errors (“a lot of trees”). Start with a clear topic sentence and add two concrete details using linking words (e.g., “also,” “because”).

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Ramna Park in the future. It is very spacious and has a large number of trees and a lake, so I think the peaceful environment would be perfect for a refreshing morning walk.

× Yes, I did, uh, as a child, I always went to the park, uh, to play around with my friends and I used to ride my bikes there, especially in the evening.

✓ Yes, I did. As a child, I always went to the park to play with my friends, and I used to ride my bike there, especially in the evening.

Run-on and some word choice issues within past tense narration. Split into two sentences for clarity; use singular 'bike' when speaking generally about riding (countable, commonly singular in this context), and remove redundant filler words. Maintain past tense consistently for childhood habits ('went', 'used to').

× Uh, uh, I, I went to the, to the park most of the time and, and it was a great experience as a child.

✓ I went to the park most of the time, and it was a great experience.

Redundant fillers and repetition; keep simple past tense 'went' and 'was'. Remove 'as a child' because context already establishes time frame. Combine clauses with a comma and coordinating conjunction for correct sentence structure.

× Uh, yes, I still love to go to the park, but, uh, since I'm an adult right now and I have to manage my times.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park, but since I'm an adult now I have to manage my time.

Use present simple progressive/habit phrasing 'love going' or 'love to go' (both acceptable) but 'going' is smoother. 'Right now' redundant with 'since'; use 'now'. 'Manage my times' is unidiomatic; use singular 'time' for general time management.

× So I normally go to the park, uh, in the morning now to, you know, do some workout there and meet some, uh, unknown faces of mine and have little bit of refreshing air, uh, in, uh.

✓ So I normally go to the park in the morning to work out, meet people I don't know, and get a bit of fresh air.

Use 'work out' instead of 'do some workout' for natural phrasing. 'Unknown faces of mine' is incorrect; use 'people I don't know'. 'Have little bit of refreshing air' should be 'get a bit of fresh air'. Remove filler words and maintain present habitual tense.

× Yes, I really want to see more parts in my city because in my city there is only one or two park and most of them are very far away from my home.

✓ Yes, I really want to see more parks in my city because there is only one or two parks and most of them are very far from my home.

Use plural 'parks' for multiple. 'One or two park' should be 'one or two parks'. Also 'very far away from my home' can be shortened to 'very far from my home' for natural phrasing.

× And the park we have, it's already very crowded.

✓ And the park we have is already very crowded.

Avoid using both subject and contracted subject 'the park we have, it's' which is redundant and awkward. Use one subject with corresponding verb. Maintain present simple for current situation.

× I think having more park will give people more space to walk.

✓ I think having more parks will give people more space to walk.

'More park' should be plural 'more parks' when referring to multiple parks. The future effect expressed with 'will give' is acceptable; ensure noun agreement.

× Yes uh, there is a park in my city called Ramna park.

✓ Yes, there is a park in my city called Ramna Park.

Capitalization of proper noun 'Ramna Park' required (not a grammar type but important). The 'there is' structure is correct for existence. No tense change needed.

× I really wanna go there because this park is very spacious.

✓ I really want to go there because this park is very spacious.

Replace colloquial 'wanna' with standard 'want to'. The adjective 'spacious' is used correctly. Keep present simple for general desire.

× There's a loss of tree there and there's a lake too and it has a very, uh, good environment and I love, I want to go there in the morning to, uh, have a refresh.

✓ There are lots of trees there, and there's a lake too; it has a very nice environment, and I want to go there in the morning to refresh.

'A loss of tree' is incorrect; use 'lots of trees' or 'a lot of trees' (plural). 'Good environment' is better as 'nice environment' or 'pleasant atmosphere'. 'Have a refresh' is ungrammatical; use 'refresh' as verb 'to refresh' or phrase 'get refreshed'. Maintain present tense for intention.