Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then add 1–2 specific supporting reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetitive or unclear phrasing (e.g. 'poor past'). Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g. 'grew up in a poor family'). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 short sentences.

Example: No, I didn’t. I grew up in a poor family and I had a lot of homework and household chores, so I rarely had time to visit parks. As a result, parks were not part of my childhood routine.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with one or two coherent reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct collocations (e.g. 'I can’t afford' vs 'it’s affordable'). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use natural expressions such as 'I enjoy going to parks because the fresh air helps me relax.'

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy going to parks because the fresh air and green space help me relax after a busy day, and visiting a park is usually inexpensive so it fits my budget.

Suggestion: This answer is generally clear but needs more precise language and a slightly fuller development. Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words ('because', 'also'). Use correct pronouns and collocations ('everyone can afford them', 'after a busy workday').

Example: Yes, I would. I think more parks would improve the city because they provide attractive green space and a free place for people to relax after a busy workday. Also, parks encourage exercise and community activities, which benefits everyone.

Suggestion: Be specific and organized. Start with a clear answer (Yes or No). If you don’t know names, say so briefly and then explain why (e.g. you visit whichever park is convenient). Use linking words ('because', 'so') and avoid excessive hesitations. Give one short example of when you visit parks.

Example: Yes, though I don’t remember the names of specific parks. I usually go to whichever park is nearest to my home because it’s convenient. For example, I often visit a small park near my office to take a short walk during lunch.

× No, I didn't, because when I was a child I was so busy in my homework and my housework.

✓ No, I didn't, because when I was a child I was so busy with my homework and my housework.

Wrong preposition: 'busy in' is incorrect; correct collocation is 'busy with'. This is a preposition use that affects past-tense sentence. Replace 'in' with 'with' to make the sentence natural.

× I was born in the poor past, a poor family.

✓ I was born into a poor family.

Sentence structure and word choice are incorrect. 'Born in the poor past' is ungrammatical. Use 'born into a poor family' to express being born into poverty. This corrects structure and uses the proper preposition 'into' with 'born'.

× Yes, and as the first I I am free and uh, I can't affordable.

✓ Yes, and first, I am free and I can't afford things.

Multiple issues: word order and wrong verb form. 'As the first' is unnatural; 'first' is appropriate. 'I can't affordable' uses an adjective instead of the verb 'afford'. Use 'afford' (verb) with an object. Maintain present tense: 'I am free and I can't afford things.'

× I can't afford my own life.

✓ I can't afford my own life expenses.

'Afford' requires an object; 'my own life' is vague. Clarify with 'my own life expenses' or 'to support myself.' Use a noun phrase that matches 'afford'.

× The park is beautiful, the air is pretty sure I can relax myself.

✓ The park is beautiful and the air is fresh, so I can relax.

Run-on and wrong words: 'pretty sure' is misused and 'relax myself' is unnatural in English; 'relax' is sufficient. Rephrase to join ideas with 'and' and use 'fresh' for air, and 'so I can relax' for correct result clause.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are beautiful and it is a good place to relax ourselves after one busy work day.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are beautiful and they are good places to relax after a busy work day.

Agreement and number errors: 'parks' (plural) should match plural pronoun/verb 'they are' and 'places' plural. 'Relax ourselves' is awkward in general statement; use 'relax'. 'One busy work day' is odd; 'a busy work day' is correct.

× And it's free, every can afford it.

✓ And they're free, everyone can afford them.

Quantifier and agreement: 'every' is incomplete; use 'everyone'. Also plural agreement: parks -> they/them. Use 'they're free' and 'everyone can afford them.'

× Umm yes, maybe, but I don't know their names.

✓ Yes, maybe, but I don't know their names.

Fillers 'Umm' are fine in speech but unnecessary in written correction. Remove filler to make sentence concise. Structure otherwise acceptable.

× I can, I umm, I never focus on their names because I only go there whenever I want you, such as when I was uh umm, busy and uh.

✓ I never focus on the parks' names because I only go there whenever I want to, for example when I am busy.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'their names' refers to parks—use possessive 'parks' names' or 'the parks' names'. 'Whenever I want you' is incorrect; should be 'whenever I want to'. Tense should match general present habit: 'I am busy' or 'I was busy' depending on meaning; present habitual fits here. Remove fillers and clarify.