Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Сократите лишние слова, избегайте повторов и исправьте грамматику (например, «we will go» → «we would go» или «we were going»). Добавьте связующее предложение и более конкретную деталь (например, какое оборудование или игра делали походы в парк запоминающимися). Практикуйте паузы без заполнителей («uh»).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My mother and I often went with my best friend to eat ice cream and play on the swings, which made those afternoons very memorable.

Suggestion: Упростите и исправьте конструкцию сравнения («Not so much as I like them as a kid» → «Not as much as when I was a kid»). Устраните тавтологию (не повторяйте «nice, quite beautiful and amazing»). Добавьте связку причины и примера и замените заполнители «uh».

Example: I don't enjoy parks as much as I did when I was a child, but I still like them because they are peaceful and green. For example, I often sit on a bench and read, which helps me relax after a busy day.

Suggestion: Уберите лишние «uh» и сократите повторы («I would love to visit them... I would love it»). Сделайте тему предложения явной и добавьте конкретику (например, какие активности вы предпочитаете: пикник, велопрогулка). Используйте связку «for example» или «such as» для ясности.

Example: I've already visited all the parks in my city, but I would welcome new ones. For example, I would go cycling with friends or have a picnic on a sunny weekend.

Suggestion: Уберите избыток эпитетов («amazing, stunning, picturesque») — достаточно одного подходящего прилагательного. Замените «so I can post it on my Instagram» более естественной причиной или добавьте личную мотивацию. Сформулируйте ответ кратко и логично: тема + причина + конкретный план.

Example: Yes, I'd like to visit a park in Berlin famous for its cherry blossoms. I'd have a picnic there and take photos to remember the trip, because the scenery looks really beautiful.

× When I was a child, I was always really happy when my mother said that we will go outside with my best friend and will eat ice cream in a park so we can spend time together.

✓ When I was a child, I was always really happy when my mother said that we would go outside with my best friend and eat ice cream in a park so we could spend time together.

The sentence reports a past statement ('my mother said'), so the future-in-the-past should use 'would' and 'could' rather than 'will' and 'can'. Use 'would' for future-in-past and omit the second 'will' before 'eat' because parallel structure uses one modal for both verbs: 'would go and eat'. Suggestion: backshift tense in reported speech to match the past context.

× And I also always love the nature.

✓ And I also have always loved nature.

'Love' in a past context describing a habitual feeling should be in the present perfect ('have loved') or simple present if meaning is current. 'The nature' is incorrect because 'nature' is an uncountable general noun and does not take the definite article here. Also place 'always' before the main verb: 'have always loved'. Suggestion: use 'have always loved nature' or 'have always loved being in nature'.

× Not so much as I like them as a kid, but I still love parks because this is a nice, quite beautiful and amazing place where you can calm down.

✓ Not as much as I did when I was a kid, but I still love parks because they are nice, quite beautiful and amazing places where you can calm down.

Compare past and present: use past tense 'did' for 'as a kid' rather than present 'like'. Also 'this is' should agree in number with 'parks' so use 'they are' and plural 'places'. Adjective order 'nice, quite beautiful and amazing' is acceptable but ensure plural agreement. Suggestion: match tense for comparison and ensure subject-verb agreement and plural nouns.

× So I can just, uh, enjoy the nature, uh, and spend my time there.

✓ So I can just enjoy nature and spend my time there.

Unnecessary article 'the' before 'nature' is incorrect for the general noun. Remove filler 'uh' in formal sentences. 'Enjoy nature' is the correct prepositional/ article usage. Suggestion: omit 'the' with general uncountable nouns like 'nature'.

× I actually already visited, uh, all parks in my city, but if there were some new, I would love to visit them with my friends, uh, maybe take a ride, uh, with the bicycles, uh, and spend time there.

✓ I have actually already visited all the parks in my city, but if there were any new ones, I would love to visit them with my friends, maybe take a ride on our bicycles and spend time there.

Use present perfect 'have visited' to express experience up to now. Include 'the' before 'parks' when specifying parks in the city. 'Some new' should be 'any new ones' for countable plural. 'Take a ride with the bicycles' is unnatural; use 'take a ride on our bicycles'. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experience, correct articles, and use 'ones' as pronoun for 'parks'.

× Yeah, I know there is a very amazing, stunning, picturesque, uh, park in Berlin with cherry blossom trees and I would love to make a picnic there and take some wonderful photos so I can post it on my Instagram.

✓ Yeah, I know there is a very amazing, stunning, picturesque park in Berlin with cherry blossom trees and I would love to have a picnic there and take some wonderful photos so I can post them on my Instagram.

'Make a picnic' is non-native; use 'have a picnic'. 'Take some wonderful photos' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Ensure pronoun agreement. Suggestion: use idiomatic collocation 'have a picnic' and match plural pronouns to plural nouns.