Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và đúng ngữ pháp; hiện tại câu có lỗi thời gian, cấu trúc lủng củng và thừa thông tin. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hoạt động bạn thích làm ở công viên, tần suất). Hạn chế dài quá 5 câu và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc (e.g. because, so, therefore).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my family often had picnics there. We went almost every weekend, and I enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the trees. Those outings made me feel relaxed and close to my family.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời không trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ sai (e.g. “envy”) và cấu trúc lặp. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + why), nêu thời gian/hoạt động cụ thể, dùng liên từ cho rõ lý do. Tránh câu dài lủng củng; tối đa 3 câu.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, my club went to a local park last week to scout locations for a video project, and I liked being outdoors while we worked. I find parks a nice place to relax and be creative.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý chính nhưng mắc lỗi ngữ pháp và từ viết tắt không rõ (“CD”). Nên đưa câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason), cung cấp số cụ thể và một so sánh hoặc hậu quả ngắn gọn. Dùng liên từ (because, since) để mạch lạc và kiểm tra số ít/ nhiều (need/needs).

Example: I don't think more parks are necessary in my city because we already have two or three parks, and one is very close to my home. These parks are well-maintained and meet most people's needs, so adding more might not be a priority.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời rất mơ hồ, thiếu tính liên kết và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp/ từ không phù hợp. Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề, nêu tên hay loại công viên, lý do cụ thể vì sao muốn đến, và khi có thể thêm chi tiết (hoạt động bạn muốn làm). Giữ tối đa 3 câu để rõ ràng.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit the International Science Park someday because I have been interested in science since childhood. I want to see the interactive exhibits and attend workshops there, which would be both fun and educational.

× In my childhood, most of my time was to going to the parks as well as my family usually go for a picnic at my local park.

✓ When I was a child, I spent most of my time going to parks, and my family usually went for picnics at our local park.

Multiple errors: 'In my childhood' is non-idiomatic — use 'When I was a child' (Sentence structure). 'most of my time was to going' is incorrect verb pattern and tense — use 'I spent most of my time going' (Verb + -ing form and past tense). 'the parks' is unnecessary article when speaking generally — use 'parks' (Article/definite article). 'my family usually go' has subject-verb agreement and past tense mismatch — use 'my family usually went' (Subject-verb agreement and past tense). Overall rewrite improves naturalness and corrects tense and agreement.

× Therefore I develop an interest in going to the park as a child.

✓ Therefore I developed an interest in going to the park as a child.

Present tense 'develop' is incorrect because the sentence refers to a past period 'as a child' — use past tense 'developed' (Present tense issue -> should be Past tense). Use past simple to match the time frame.

× Easily I have gone to the park last week due to the need of filming our envy so that my club decide to go on go to the park to take the places for filming.

✓ I went to the park last week because we needed to film, so my club decided to go there to scout locations for filming.

Multiple past-tense and phrasing errors: 'I have gone ... last week' mixes present perfect with a specific past time — use simple past 'I went' (Past tense issue). 'due to the need of filming our envy' is unclear and ungrammatical — corrected to 'because we needed to film' (Sentence structure and word choice). 'my club decide' should be past 'my club decided' (Past tense issue). 'go on go to the park to take the places for filming' is ungrammatical; 'scout locations for filming' is idiomatic.

× As far as I know, my CD currently have around two or three parks.

✓ As far as I know, my city currently has around two or three parks.

'CD' is likely a typo for 'city' (Sentence structure/word choice). 'my CD currently have' shows subject-verb disagreement — singular subject 'city' requires 'has' not 'have' (Singular and plural issue / Subject-verb agreement).

× One of them is near my house, so I don't think that my city need to develop more parks in the future.

✓ One of them is near my house, so I don't think that my city needs to develop more parks in the future.

'my city need' uses base form 'need' after a singular noun — requires 'needs' for subject-verb agreement in present tense (Present tense issue / Subject-verb agreement). The rest of the sentence is fine.

× There's a park that I have dream to go there.

✓ There's a park that I have dreamed of going to.

'I have dream to go there' uses incorrect verb form and preposition: 'dream' should be past participle 'dreamed' with present perfect 'have dreamed', and the verb pattern requires 'dream of doing' or 'dreamed of going to' (There be issue and Verb in the past participle form). Removed redundant 'there' at the end because 'going to' already indicates direction.

× Science since I was a kid, which is as low as a Kung Fu. International parks, umm.

✓ Since I was a kid, I have been interested in science and martial arts, and I would like to visit international parks.

This fragment is ungrammatical and incoherent: 'Science since I was a kid' needs a subject and verb; 'which is as low as a Kung Fu' is meaningless and likely wrong word choices; 'International parks, umm' is a fragment. The corrected sentence provides coherent ideas and proper sentence structure (Sentence structure errors).