Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense), remove repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, and, so) correctly. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were full of treats and activities. For example, vendors sold popcorn and candy, and there were often small games and rides for kids. Because of that lively atmosphere, I enjoyed spending afternoons there.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and clear reasons in present tense. Avoid repetitive phrases and unclear comparisons. Explain one or two specific reasons why you seldom go, and finish with a concise concluding sentence. Use linking words like because and however.

Example: I don’t go to parks much these days because items sold there tend to be more expensive than elsewhere and it’s not as convenient. As a result, I usually cycle past parks instead of stopping, though I might visit occasionally for exercise or fresh air.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific supporting details about benefits for different groups, using linking words (for example, furthermore, however). Avoid vague words and correct minor grammar (parks, unnecessary). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Example: Yes, I think more parks would be beneficial. For example, additional parks would give children safe places to play and provide older people with pleasant paths for walking or group exercises such as dancing.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly and give a specific description of what would attract you. Use correct grammar (would attract me; high-tech), and provide one concrete example of a park feature you would enjoy. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like for example.

Example: Not at the moment — most parks don’t interest me. However, I would visit a high-tech park that offers interactive attractions, for example virtual reality games or augmented-reality trails that make walking more engaging.

× Yes, I like to going to park as a child 'cause every time I go to park they will sell some popcorn or some candies and some and there's a lot of mistakes. So I very like to go to the park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because every time I went to a park they would sell popcorn and candy, and there were many stalls. So I really liked going to the park.

The student is describing past habitual actions, so present tense 'like' and incorrect infinitive 'to going' should be past simple/habitual: 'liked going'. Use plural 'parks' or 'a park' consistently. 'They will sell' (future) should be 'they would sell' for habitual past. 'Some candies' is nonnative; use 'candy' (uncountable) or 'sweets'. 'There's a lot of mistakes' is unrelated; corrected to 'there were many stalls' to reflect likely meaning. Also use 'really liked' instead of 'very like'. Suggestions: use past simple for past habits, remove 'to' before gerund, choose correct countable/uncountable nouns.

× Well, I don't really like to go into park now 'cause the things that sell in the past monthly will be expensive than outside.

✓ Well, I don't really like going to the park now because the things sold inside are more expensive than outside.

This is a present tense preference, so use 'don't really like' + gerund 'going'. 'Go into park' should be 'go to the park'. The clause describing prices uses wrong tense and structure: 'the things that sell in the past monthly will be expensive than outside' is incorrect; use past participle 'sold' to describe items sold there, and comparative form 'more expensive than outside'. Suggestions: use gerund after 'like', use 'sold' for passive description of goods, and 'more... than' for comparisons.

× So I don't really like it in the I don't really like to work, so I seldom go to the park, maybe only by bike.

✓ So I don't really like it there and I don't really like crowds, so I seldom go to the park; maybe I go only by bike.

Original has repetition and unclear reference 'it in the I don't really like to work'. Clarify meaning: likely dislikes crowds/atmosphere. Use 'there' for location and correct conjunctions. 'Maybe only by bike' reordered to natural English 'I go only by bike'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, state cause clearly, place adverbs in natural positions.

× Maybe I will choose to go to the park.

✓ Maybe I will choose to go to the park.

This sentence is grammatical; it expresses a future possibility correctly using 'will'. Suggestion: optionally use 'might' or 'may' for lower certainty: 'Maybe I will' or 'I might choose to go to the park'.

× Well, these are good things. More perks mean more children can play in there, and the paths may be more attractive to the older people.

✓ Well, those would be good things. More parks mean more children can play there, and the paths could be more attractive for older people.

'These are' changed to 'those would be' for hypothetical preference. 'Perks' is incorrect for 'parks'. 'Play in there' should be 'play there'. 'the older people' overly specific; use 'older people'. 'may' to 'could' is optional. Use 'for' with 'attractive'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns ('parks'), use correct demonstratives, and prepositions ('play there', 'attractive for').

× They can take exercise, maybe dancing there.

✓ They can exercise there, maybe dance there.

Use verb 'exercise' or 'take exercise' (less common) and keep forms parallel: 'maybe dance there' instead of 'maybe dancing there'. Gerund 'dancing' must follow an appropriate verb or be rephrased. Suggestions: keep parallel verb forms and use natural collocations like 'exercise' or 'dance'.

× So for me there's no necessary, but for children and old people, that's very good for them.

✓ So for me it's not necessary, but for children and older people that's very good for them.

'There's no necessary' is ungrammatical; use 'it's not necessary'. 'Old people' better as 'older people'. Minor punctuation adjusted. Suggestions: use adjective form 'necessary' with 'it's not', and prefer 'older people'.

× Well, not really. There's no parks can attract me to go there.

✓ Well, not really. There are no parks that can attract me to go there.

'There's no parks' mixes singular 'there is' with plural 'parks'; use 'there are'. Also add 'that' to introduce relative clause. 'Attract me to go there' is grammatically okay but could be simplified to 'attract me'. Suggestions: match 'there is/are' with noun number and include relative pronoun 'that'.

× Maybe the high technique parks, uh, the parks have more games or some VR to interact with me.

✓ Maybe high-tech parks that have more games or some VR for interaction with visitors.

Use compound adjective 'high-tech' not 'high technique'. 'Parks have more games or some VR to interact with me' is awkward; use 'that have more games or VR experiences for visitors' or 'for interaction with visitors'. Suggestions: use correct adjective forms and natural collocations like 'VR experiences' and avoid 'interact with me' in general statements.

× Maybe a little bit attractive to me.

✓ That would be a little attractive to me.

Fragment missing subject and verb; make full sentence. Use conditional 'would be' to indicate hypothetical future attraction. 'A little bit attractive to me' is informal; 'a little attractive to me' or 'somewhat attractive to me' is better. Suggestions: always include subject and verb; choose appropriate modal to match hypothetical tone.