Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more fluent, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + reason), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and repeated words, and correct common errors (e.g., 'going to parks', 'I was really interested', 'read there', 'play sports').

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were peaceful places where I could read and relax. In addition, I often played sports and talked with my family there, which made those visits fun and memorable.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and explain briefly with specific details and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' correctly. Replace vague phrases ('so soft') with a precise description (e.g., 'less often' or 'more relaxing'). Avoid repetition ('now' twice) and incorrect comparative forms ('more busy' -> 'busier').

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I visit them less often now because my schedule is busier. For example, I usually go to Gory Park on weekends to relax and get some fresh air.

Suggestion: Respond directly and give clear, specific reasons with correct word choice. Use linking words ('because', 'so', 'for example') and avoid hesitant fillers. Correct collocations: 'make the city greener', 'improve our quality of life', 'relax there'.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they would make the city greener and improve our quality of life. For example, having nearby parks would give people a place to relax and exercise after work.

Suggestion: Answer clearly with a topic sentence and specific examples. Correct grammar and vocabulary: 'abroad' or 'overseas', 'I am especially impressed by', 'unique wildlife that I cannot see in my city', and 'I want to visit them'. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit many parks overseas because I am impressed by their stunning landscapes and unique wildlife. For example, I hope to see national parks in New Zealand or Costa Rica, where I could experience scenery and animals that I don't have at home.

× Well, when I was a child I so I really interested in going apart because umm to read to it.

✓ Well, when I was a child I was really interested in going to parks because I could read there.

The original sentence has extra words and incorrect word order. 'I so I really interested' lacks the auxiliary verb 'was' and proper structure; this matches sentence structure errors (ID 26). 'apart' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'going to parks'. 'to read to it' is ungrammatical; use 'read there' or 'read in a park'. Suggestion: use simple past 'I was interested' and place verbs and objects in correct order.

× I can do more activities that umm like a place, play sport or talk with my family.

✓ I could do many activities there, like play sports or talk with my family.

The phrase 'that umm like a place' is ungrammatical and 'play sport' should be 'play sports'. The modal and tense should match past context: use 'could' (past ability) rather than 'can'. This involves incorrect use of present participle/phrase (ID 10) and sentence structure. Suggestion: simplify to 'I could do many activities there, like play sports or talk with my family.'

× So it's so interesting.

✓ So it was very interesting.

In context the student speaks about childhood (past), so tense should be past: 'was' not 'is'. Also avoid repeated 'so'. This is a sentence structure/tenses mismatch (ID 26). Suggestion: match tense to context and use one intensifier: 'very'.

× Well now I still like going apart, but umm, my schedule now is more busier than before, so I just spend the weekend to Gory Park.

✓ Well, I still like going to parks, but my schedule is busier than before, so I only spend weekends at Gory Park.

Multiple issues: 'going apart' should be 'going to parks'; 'more busier' is double comparative (busier alone is correct) which is a sentence structure/grammar error (ID 26); 'just spend the weekend to Gory Park' should be 'only spend weekends at Gory Park' (use 'at' for location and plural for habitual weekends). Suggestion: remove 'more' with 'busier', use 'only' for limitation, and use correct preposition 'at'.

× Umm, it's so it's still interesting, but umm, it's so soft.

✓ It's still interesting, but it's a bit quiet.

The phrase 'it's so soft' is odd for a park; likely intended meaning is 'quiet' or 'peaceful'. 'So it's still interesting' has repetition. This is misuse of adjective/adverb (ID 13). Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective for intended meaning and avoid redundant phrases.

× I mean I don't think it before but uh, now I really think I need more parks in my city because it will umm, make a city greener and improve our equally quality so I can relaxing in this.

✓ I mean I hadn't thought about it before, but now I really think we need more parks in my city because they would make the city greener and improve our quality of life so I can relax there.

Multiple issues: tense and modal errors ('don't think it before' should be 'hadn't thought about it before'); 'it will' should agree in number with 'parks' and context ('they would' or 'they will'); 'equally quality' is incorrect—use 'quality of life'; 'can relaxing' should be 'can relax'. These are modal/tense and word choice errors (ID 4). Suggestion: use 'hadn't thought', use plural pronoun 'they', and correct noun phrase 'quality of life' and verb 'relax'.

× Well, there are many parks that I want to visit in the overseas, you know, because I I especially impressive with them with their stunning landscapes and unique wildlife that I can see it at my city.

✓ Well, there are many parks I want to visit overseas because I was especially impressed by their stunning landscapes and unique wildlife, which I cannot see in my city.

Problems include article and preposition use ('in the overseas' should be 'overseas'), tense ('impressive' should be past participle 'impressed'), incorrect preposition 'with them', and the clause 'that I can see it at my city' is ungrammatical — use 'which I cannot see in my city'. These map to 'There be issue' (ID 3) and other related errors. Suggestion: use 'overseas', 'impressed by', past participle for feelings, and correct relative clause structure.

× So I want to reach it.

✓ So I want to visit them.

'Reach it' is unnatural for visiting parks; use 'visit them' or 'go to them'. This is a sentence structure/word choice error (ID 26). Suggestion: use common collocations like 'visit' or 'go to'.