Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organise your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 specific details. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and incorrect verb forms. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "We would often... and sometimes..."). Correct vocabulary: say "unforgettable" or "memorable" correctly and avoid contradictory phrasing.

Example: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I would cycle there with my friends and we often played cricket or hide-and-seek. These outings were memorable because we spent hours talking and laughing together.

Suggestion: Use present simple consistently for habitual actions and avoid past forms like "used to" when you mean current routines. Reduce repetition and filler words. Provide one or two clear details and use linking words such as "after" or "then." Clarify odd phrases (e.g., you don't "take a bath in the park").

Example: Yes. I still go to the park every morning. After I finish my run, I do stretches and some yoga exercises there, which help me relax and prepare for the day.

Suggestion: Answer directly and logically. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words ("because", "for example"). Avoid unclear phrases ("ECD", "see more parts") and grammar errors. Be precise about benefits of parks and avoid overgeneralisation.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they encourage people to spend time outdoors. For example, parks give children safe places to play and help neighbours meet, which reduces screen time and improves community health.

Suggestion: Be concise and accurate. Begin with a direct statement of the park you want to visit, then give 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid repetition and incorrect superlatives (check facts: "world's biggest" may be incorrect). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Example: Yes. I would love to visit the theme parks in Singapore, such as Universal Studios, because they offer many exciting rides and high-quality facilities. As someone who enjoys adventure, I have included this visit on my bucket list.

× I used to go to the park in, uh, bicycle, uh, I'll be uh, roaming out with my friends, uh, and we will be having so much chat, uh, playing uh, cricket in the park.

✓ I used to go to the park by bicycle, I would roam around with my friends, and we would have many chats, playing cricket in the park.

The student used incorrect verb forms and collocations: 'in bicycle' should be 'by bicycle' (preposition with transport), 'I'll be roaming' and 'we will be having' are inappropriate for habitual past actions. Use 'would roam' and 'would have' or past simple for habitual past. Also 'so much chat' is unidiomatic; use 'many chats' or 'a lot of chatting'. Use '-ing' in 'playing cricket' is fine as a participle describing concurrent action. Suggestion: use 'would' or past simple for repeated past actions and correct preposition 'by'.

× We're playing some hide and seek games and everything.

✓ We played some hide-and-seek games and other activities.

The original mixes present continuous 'We're playing' with past narrative. For past habitual events, use past simple 'we played'. Also 'hide and seek' as an adjective compound is normally hyphenated when qualifying 'games'. 'And everything' is vague; replace with 'other activities'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clear nouns.

× Those are unmemorable things.

✓ Those are unforgettable memories.

The student used 'unmemorable' which is not the intended meaning. They meant positive lasting memories: 'unforgettable memories' or 'memorable moments'. Use appropriate adjective 'unforgettable' or 'memorable' with 'memories'. Suggestion: choose the adjective that matches intended sentiment.

× Yeah, still in the morning I, I used to go to park.

✓ Yes, I still go to the park in the morning.

'Used to' describes past habits, but the student means a current habit. Use present simple 'I still go'. Also use article 'the' with 'park'. Suggestion: use present simple for current routines and include correct articles.

× So everyday morning after I finish my run, I used to go to the park, do some stretches and, uh, do some stuff yogas, uh, in the park.

✓ So every morning after I finish my run, I go to the park to do some stretches and some yoga exercises.

Again 'used to' incorrectly indicates past habit; present simple 'I go' fits current routine. 'Everyday morning' should be 'every morning' (everyday is adjective). 'Do some stuff yogas' is ungrammatical; use 'some yoga exercises' or 'do yoga'. Suggestion: use present simple for routines, correct word forms and collocations.

× This gives me relief and I will take some, some bath, uh, in the park.

✓ This gives me relief and I take a shower when I return home.

'Take some bath' is ungrammatical; use 'take a bath' or 'take a shower'. However, taking a bath 'in the park' is unlikely and unidiomatic; likely intended 'after returning' so I suggested 'when I return home'. Also mixing present 'gives' with future 'I will take' is inconsistent; use present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use correct collocations 'take a shower' and consistent tense.

× Yes, I would see more. I would use to, I would want to see more parts, uh, ECD because they have to boost all the people to come out of their home.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks, especially well-designed community parks, because they encourage people to leave their homes.

The speaker misused 'would see more' and 'would use to' incorrectly. 'Would like' expresses desire. 'Parts' should be 'parks'. 'Have to boost all the people' is unnatural; 'encourage people' is better. Avoid 'would' repetition that implies conditional rather than desire. Suggestion: use 'would like' or 'want' for wishes and choose correct nouns and verbs like 'encourage'.

× They will be playing with their friends. Uh, if there are no cars, then everyone will be using their phones and uh, they won't come and see the world.

✓ They will play with their friends. If there are no cars nearby, people will not use their phones and will go outside to enjoy the world.

The original mixes future continuous and odd causation. Use simple future 'will play' for predicted actions. 'If there are no cars' likely means 'no cars nearby' so add 'nearby'. 'Everyone will be using their phones' is fine but context suggests contrast; rephrase to clarify. Also 'won't come and see the world' is unidiomatic; use 'will go outside to enjoy the world.' Suggestion: clarify prepositional phrases and use idiomatic verbs.

× Yeah, I have a dream of going to Singapore and and enjoying the theme park.

✓ Yes, I have a dream of going to Singapore and enjoying the theme parks there.

Minor repetition 'and and' removed. 'Theme park' singular could be plural if multiple parks; 'theme parks there' sounds natural. Use present simple 'I have a dream' is fine. Suggestion: remove duplicated words and match singular/plural as intended.

× So I think that is the world biggest park with good amenities and a lot of adventurous things.

✓ So I think that it is one of the world's biggest parks, with good amenities and many adventurous attractions.

Original misses possessive apostrophe and pluralization: 'world biggest' should be 'world's biggest' or 'one of the world's biggest'. 'A lot of adventurous things' is vague; use 'many adventurous attractions'. Suggestion: use possessive 'world's', correct article 'one of the', and plural nouns for countable items.

× So as I am adventure person, I want to try those things in my life.

✓ Since I am an adventurous person, I want to try those activities in my life.

'Adventure person' is incorrect; use adjective 'adventurous'. Missing article 'an'. 'Those things' is vague; 'those activities' is better. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× So obviously I will try in my life and this is in my bucket list.

✓ So I will definitely try them in my life; this is on my bucket list.

'Try in my life' is awkward; 'try them in my life' or simply 'try them' is better. 'In my bucket list' should be 'on my bucket list'. Use 'definitely' instead of 'obviously' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'on' with 'bucket list' and refer back to plural 'them' for activities.