Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Correct grammar and make the answer concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends, and we played games like football and hide-and-seek. Because the park had a big playground and lots of trees, it was my favourite place to spend afternoons.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation sounds and be more specific. Begin with a direct statement, then give reasons and a concrete example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and limit to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go there whenever I have spare time because a park near my home is very convenient. For example, last weekend I walked there with my sister and we chatted while sitting under a big oak tree.

Suggestion: Be concise and use clearer linking words. State your opinion then explain benefits with specific details. Use fewer filler words and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g. ‘green spaces’ instead of repeated vague terms).

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it is small and currently has few green spaces. More parks would provide shade, playgrounds for children, and pleasant areas for walking and relaxing.

Suggestion: Use accurate descriptions and link reasons clearly. Give one or two specific features you want to see and explain why. Avoid awkward phrases; use correct adjectives and plural forms.

Example: Yes, I hope to visit several parks in the future, especially Lakeview Park. I am interested because it is famous for its wildlife and colourful flowers, and I would like to go on a nature walk and take photographs.

× I love to going and park.

✓ I love going to the park.

The verb pattern is incorrect. After 'love' we use the base form or the -ing form: 'love going' or 'love to go'. Also the preposition and article were missing: 'going to the park' is correct. Suggestion: use 'I love going to the park' or 'I love to go to the park.'

× Going to park as I was child I often used to go with my friends and one day I went to the park and there I saw different kids that came from.

✓ When I was a child, I often used to go to the park with my friends. One day I went to the park and saw different children who had come from other places.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'park' and incorrect word order for the time clause. 'As I was child' should be 'When I was a child'. 'Used to go' is fine but needed 'to the park'. The second clause 'there I saw different kids that came from' is incomplete and informal; use 'children who had come from other places' for clarity and correct relative clause and tense. Suggestion: split into two sentences and include articles and correct relative clause.

× Yes, I often go to the parks, uh, whenever I have spare time and uh, that park is uh, nearby to my home.

✓ Yes, I often go to parks whenever I have spare time, and the park is near my home.

Using 'the parks' is unnatural here; use 'parks' or 'the park' depending on meaning. 'Nearby to my home' is incorrect: 'near my home' or 'close to my home'. Also remove filler words and redundant article. Suggestion: 'I often go to parks whenever I have spare time, and the park is near my home.'

× So I prefer to go with my friends or with my family members and, uh, I, uh, spend time.

✓ So I prefer to go with my friends or my family and spend time there.

Awkward phrasing and redundancy: 'with my family members' is wordy—'my family' is natural. 'I spend time' is incomplete without an object; add 'there' to show where. Suggestion: streamline to 'I prefer to go with my friends or my family and spend time there.'

× As uh, my city is not so big so there are limited parks, but I would like to see more parks, uh, with uh as they serve more greenery and trees and the more places to play for children and enjoy.

✓ My city is not very big, so there are only a few parks, but I would like to see more parks because they provide more greenery, trees, and places for children to play and enjoy.

Problems: filler words, awkward connectors, and incorrect phrases 'limited parks' and 'with uh as they serve'. Use 'only a few parks' or 'limited number of parks'. Use 'because' to give reason and correct parallel structure: 'provide more greenery, trees, and places for children to play and enjoy.' Suggestion: remove fillers and make sentence concise and parallel.

× Yes, there are several parks that I want to visit in future.

✓ Yes, there are several parks that I want to visit in the future.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'future' in this phrase. Use 'in the future' for standard English. Suggestion: include 'the' in time expressions like 'in the future.'

× One of them is Lakeview Park and this is known as wildest animals and with beautiful unique flowers.

✓ One of them is Lakeview Park, which is known for its wildlife and its beautiful, unique flowers.

'Known as wildest animals' is incorrect; use 'known for its wildlife' or 'known for wild animals'. Word order 'beautiful unique' should be 'beautiful, unique' with a comma and correct adjective order. Also use a relative clause 'which is known for...' Suggestion: use 'known for its wildlife and its beautiful, unique flowers.'

× So I would like to explore this park.

✓ So I would like to explore the park.

Minor article choice: 'this park' is acceptable in speech, but 'the park' is more natural after mentioning a specific park by name. No -ing correction needed; kept because matches request to only correct listed types. Suggestion: use 'the park' for clarity.