Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), sau đó đưa ra 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (như chơi trò chơi, làm bạn mới, mua đồ ăn). Tránh từ ngữ lặp lại, ngắt quãng quá nhiều và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “it's good” -> “they were great”). Sử dụng một liên từ để kết nối ý (e.g., “because” hoặc “so”).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were fun and lively places. I often made new friends there and enjoyed playing on the swings and buying snacks from small stalls. These experiences made parks feel special to me.

Suggestion: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm trong câu. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes/No + lý do ngắn). Hạn chế lặp từ và dùng linking word để nối mệnh đề (e.g., “but” hoặc “however”). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm ở nhà hoặc tại công viên để làm rõ lý do. Giữ không quá 3 câu tổng cộng.

Example: Not really, because as a teenager I prefer staying at home and watching videos on the internet. However, I still go to the park sometimes because it helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, I enjoy sitting on a bench and listening to music there.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời không rõ và có nhiều lỗi gây khó hiểu. Trả lời trực tiếp trước (Yes/No + lý do). Nếu phản đối, giải thích cụ thể: ví dụ vì ngân sách/ưu tiên khác hoặc vì công viên hiện tại cần bảo trì hơn là xây thêm. Dùng liên từ và cấu trúc ngữ pháp chuẩn (e.g., “I wouldn’t want more parks; instead, I think the government should maintain existing ones”).

Example: I wouldn't want many more parks in the city; instead, I think the government should invest in maintaining and improving the parks we already have. For example, they could plant more flowers and fix playground equipment so current parks are more attractive.

Suggestion: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần diễn đạt gọn và chính xác hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes, I would like to go to...), nêu lý do cụ thể (chụp ảnh, thưởng thức cảnh sắc) và tránh lặp từ. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về loại công viên (e.g., botanical garden) và cách bạn sẽ tận dụng chuyến đi. Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit a park full of flowers, such as a botanical garden, because I enjoy taking photos of colorful plants. I often post these photos online and like reading people's positive comments about the scenery.

× Yes, I loved it's good going to the park as a child, because whenever small, the box means that like beautiful, interesting place for me to make new friends. Uh, buy new, buy some stuff, buy some food.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because when I was small, it seemed like a beautiful, interesting place for me to make new friends and buy snacks.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronouns and possessive forms ('it's good going') and unclear references ('the box means that'). Also the clause 'whenever small' lacks a subject and auxiliary; use 'when I was small'. Break up the ideas and use correct pronouns: 'it seemed' for general impressions and 'buy snacks' instead of repeated 'buy' phrases. Suggestion: simplify sentences, include explicit subject and use 'when I was small'.

× Probably not 'cause I am a teenager now so I'm prefer staying at home to watch to watch the on the Internet instead of going out at the park. However, going going to the box make me feel relaxed.

✓ Probably not, because I am a teenager now so I prefer staying at home to watch things on the Internet instead of going out to the park. However, going to the park makes me feel relaxed.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'I'm prefer' (should be simple present 'I prefer') and repeated words. 'to watch the on the Internet' is missing a noun; use 'things' or 'videos'. 'Going going to the box' is unclear and likely should be 'going to the park'. Subject-verb agreement: 'going to the park makes me feel relaxed' uses third-person singular verb 'makes'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use correct present simple and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Maybe no I don't wanna see too many parks on in my city. I think the golf government so take care of the back more like this so decorate more.

✓ Maybe not; I don't want to see too many parks in my city. I think the government should take care of the parks more and decorate them.

Preposition errors: use 'in my city' not 'on in my city'. Colloquial 'wanna' should be 'want to'. 'Golf government' is wrong word choice; likely 'local government' or just 'the government'. 'Take care of the back' should be 'take care of the parks'. Verb modal: use 'should' to express recommendation. Suggestion: replace informal words, correct prepositions and nouns, and use appropriate modal verbs.

× I would like to go to the park which has many flowers because I really want to take take photos in posts them on the Internet.

✓ I would like to go to a park that has many flowers because I really want to take photos and post them on the Internet.

Redundancy 'take take' should be one 'take'. Incorrect structure 'take photos in posts them' mixes verb forms; use base verbs 'take' and 'post' coordinated with 'and'. Use relative pronoun 'that' or 'which' with correct clause. Suggestion: remove duplicates and coordinate verbs correctly.

× I really like the way people comment on my post that while the park so beautiful, so pretty.

✓ I really like the way people comment on my posts, saying that the park is so beautiful and pretty.

The original lacks the verb 'is' after 'park' and uses informal and redundant adjectives 'so beautiful, so pretty'. Also 'comment on my post that while' is incorrect structure; use 'saying that' or 'by saying that'. Suggestion: include the verb 'is', avoid redundant adjectives, and use a clear reporting verb like 'saying'.