Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (enjoy → enjoyed; 'green sceneries' → 'green scenery' or 'green spaces'; avoid 'having to meet').

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I loved the green spaces where I could play badminton or jog with friends, and our local park held fireworks displays on special occasions, which made visits exciting.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly about current feelings toward parks, use present simple, and avoid irrelevant details or unclear phrases ('Parkinson's' likely mispronounced). Give one clear reason with linking word. Fix vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'sunburned' → 'getting sunburned'; 'watch my movies' → 'watch movies').

Example: Not really. I prefer staying at home to read or watch movies because many parks near me lack shaded areas, so I would risk getting sunburned if I stayed outside for long.

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatically correct. Use plural agreement ('parks are') and replace vague phrases with clear reasons. Use a linking word like 'because' and provide one specific benefit (e.g., recreation, community space).

Example: Yes, I would. Parks are a sign that the city values residents’ well-being because they provide quiet places for relaxation and safe areas for children to play.

Suggestion: Answer clearly whether you want to visit and describe the park using correct grammar and tenses. Avoid awkward constructions ('Once we're in'). Use linking words ('for example') and correct verb forms ('gather' not 'gathers'). Be specific about what attracts you.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit a park I saw on a TV show. For example, it looked lively — people gathered to play chess, take walks, and join traditional children’s games, which made it seem friendly and fun.

× Yes, as a child I enjoy looking at green sceneries and having to meet new people who have different kinds of hobbies like badminton or jogging or just sightseeing in the park.

✓ Yes, as a child I enjoyed looking at green scenery and meeting new people who had different kinds of hobbies like badminton, jogging, or just sightseeing in the park.

The speaker refers to childhood (past), so verbs must be in past tense (enjoy -> enjoyed; have -> had). 'Having to meet' is incorrect here; use 'meeting'. 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; use 'scenery' (uncountable). Also use parallel forms in the list and commas for clarity.

× Also, in the park near us they have fireworks, so I like going to the park as a child.

✓ Also, the park near us had fireworks, so I liked going to the park as a child.

Maintain past tense for childhood. 'In the park near us they have fireworks' is awkward; 'the park near us had fireworks' is clearer. Preposition use is acceptable but tense and subject clarity needed.

× Right now I like the feeling of being alone in my apartment and just read books without having sunburned.

✓ Right now I like the feeling of being alone in my apartment and just reading books without getting sunburned.

Parallel structure requires gerund 'reading' to match 'being'. 'Having sunburned' is incorrect; use 'getting sunburned' or 'getting a sunburn'. Tense 'right now' uses present, so present participle is appropriate.

× When I go to Parkinson's, usually there are no shades where I can read or watch my movies.

✓ When I go to the park, usually there are no shaded areas where I can read or watch movies.

'Parkinson's' is likely a mistake for 'park'. 'No shades where I can' is awkward; 'no shaded areas where I can' is clearer. 'Watch my movies' should be 'watch movies' unless referring to personal films; use article if specific.

× Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city since I think parks is a reflection that we are taking importance on the umm pleasure and having a quiet time for the people in our community.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city since I think parks are a reflection that we value leisure and provide quiet spaces for people in our community.

Subject-verb agreement: 'parks is' should be 'parks are'. Phrase 'taking importance on' is incorrect; use 'value' or 'place importance on'. 'Umm' removed. 'Pleasure and having a quiet time' is awkward; use 'leisure' and 'provide quiet spaces' for clarity and correct noun forms.

× Yes, I don't know the specific park, but I watched it on a TV show.

✓ No correction needed

The sentence correctly uses past tense 'watched' to refer to seeing the park on a TV show; however, if the speaker meant they have not visited it yet, this is appropriate. No grammatical error matching the provided list.

× Once we're in, there were a lot of people who gathers for their different kinds of hobbies like playing chess, having a walk around the park, or even playing just childhood games.

✓ Once we were in, there were a lot of people who gathered for different hobbies like playing chess, taking walks around the park, or even playing childhood games.

Mixed tense: 'Once we're in' (present) conflicts with 'there were' (past); use past 'Once we were in'. Subject-verb agreement: 'people who gathers' should be 'people who gathered'. 'Having a walk' is better as 'taking walks'. 'Playing just childhood games' should be 'playing childhood games' for natural word order.