Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I loved going to parks as a child."), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear words ("work" likely incorrect) and fix verb tense (use past tense). Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "because").

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because there was a big playground near my house where I could play with friends. For example, we often played on the swings and had picnics under the trees.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use correct verb forms and concise linking. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I still like parks, but I don't go often now."). Explain briefly why and give a specific example of when you go. Avoid repeating similar phrases.

Example: I still enjoy parks, but I rarely visit them because I'm busy at university. However, when I have a free afternoon, I like to walk in a nearby park to relax and catch up with friends.

Suggestion: Be clear and use correct nouns/plurals and connectors. Begin with a direct statement ("Yes, I would like more parks in my city.") and give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because... and also..."). Avoid unclear phrases like "world parks" and "perk."

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play, and they also offer quiet areas where older people can exercise or relax.

Suggestion: Be specific and fluent. State the park type clearly ("an amusement park") and give 1–2 reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds and unclear words ("train"). Use correct article usage and verb forms.

Example: In the future, I would like to visit a large amusement park because I enjoy thrilling rides and many different activities. For example, I hope to go to a famous park with roller coasters and live shows when I have more free time.

× When I was a child I love to go work and where I live here there is a Greenberg and there are lots of activities here and also there is a big playground in the park, so I love to.

✓ When I was a child I loved to go to the park where I lived; there was a green area with lots of activities and a big playground, so I loved it.

The original mixes past context with present tense ('When I was a child I love'). Use past tense 'loved' for habits in the past. Missing prepositions: 'go work' should be 'go to the park' and 'where I live here' should be 'where I lived'. Sentence is long and repetitive; combine clauses with punctuation and choose correct articles ('a green area'). Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and include necessary prepositions and articles. Please note: corrected sentence keeps past tense and clear prepositions.

× As now I'm in a university, I don't have any time to go park. But I've missed that time when I was a child. But sometimes when I have free time, I love to go park.

✓ Now that I'm at university, I don't have any time to go to the park. But I miss those times from my childhood. Sometimes when I have free time, I like to go to the park.

'As now I'm in a university' is awkward; use 'Now that I'm at university.' 'Go park' is missing the preposition 'to' and article 'the'. 'I don't have any time' is acceptable but 'any' can be omitted. 'I've missed that time when I was a child' should be 'I miss those times' to express ongoing nostalgia. 'I love to go park' should be 'I like to go to the park'. Use present simple ('I like') for general preferences and correct prepositions/articles. Suggestion: use 'to the park', choose appropriate tense for general habits and feelings.

× Yes, I love to because I think if world parks are in my area, that will be so great for children's because and also however I think old peoples can also use the perk.

✓ Yes, I would love more parks because if parks were in my area it would be great for children, and older people could also use the park.

Sentence has modal and conditional errors. Use conditional structure: 'if parks were in my area, it would be great' (second conditional for hypothetical). 'That will be' is inappropriate for hypothetical; use 'would be'. 'Children's' is incorrect possessive; use 'children'. 'Old peoples' is incorrect plural and word choice; use 'older people'. 'Perk' is wrong word; use 'park'. Also unnecessary words like 'because' and 'however' are redundant. Suggestion: use correct conditional modals ('would'), correct plural nouns and vocabulary. Note: keep polite modal 'would love' to express desire.

× In future I want to go, uh, amusement park because that's my dream I think because I love to go amusement park and there are so many activities I can do. So that's my train and that will happen if I wish.

✓ In the future I want to go to an amusement park because that's my dream. I love going to amusement parks and there are so many activities I can do. That's my dream and I hope it will happen.

Missing articles and prepositions: 'go amusement park' should be 'go to an amusement park'. Use 'in the future' or 'in future' — 'in the future' is natural. Use gerund 'going' for preferences ('I love going to amusement parks'). 'That's my train' is incorrect vocabulary; intended 'dream'. 'That will happen if I wish' is unnatural; use 'I hope it will happen' to express desire about the future. Suggestion: use correct articles ('an'), prepositions ('to'), gerunds for likes, and natural expressions ('I hope').