Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency by using correct verb forms and reducing fillers. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, change repeated or incorrect verbs (e.g., "used to bring") and avoid filler sounds like "umm" and "uh." Also correct count/noun agreement ("my siblings and me" → "my siblings and I") and simplify sentences to stay within the 5-sentence limit.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents used to take my siblings and me to the park every Sunday, where we played ball games and ran around. Because the parks were spacious, I remember feeling free and happy while playing with other children.

Suggestion: Focus on correct sentence structure, verb tenses, and coherence. Start with a direct statement answering the question, then give one specific reason and one result using linking words like "because" and "so." Remove redundancies and fillers, and correct phrasing (e.g., "the park is a five-minute walk from my home").

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit the park after breakfast because it is only a five-minute walk from my home and a good place to walk or cycle. As a result, exercising there improves my mood and helps me stay healthy.

Suggestion: Make the response more precise and formal: give a clear topic sentence, then a specific reason and an example. Use correct plural/singular forms and avoid tentative phrasing like "would recommend that more parks will be..." Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide free spaces for exercise and relaxation. For example, additional parks could help people with obesity by offering safe places for walking and group fitness activities.

Suggestion: Clarify the intended meaning and correct vocabulary ("2 to 3 bikes" unclear — likely "2 or 3 parks"). Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific parks or features you want to visit, and explain why using linking words. Eliminate fillers and provide concrete details (names, activities, or attractions seen online).

Example: Yes, I want to visit more parks in the future because I have only been to two or three so far. For example, I would like to explore the parks in Bahai Town that I saw on Instagram because they have lakes and walking trails that look very peaceful and scenic.

× So I clearly remember when I was a child, I often visit uh parks on Sunday.

✓ So I clearly remember that when I was a child, I often visited parks on Sundays.

The sentence refers to habitual actions in the past ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'visit' to 'visited'. Also use 'Sundays' for repeated events and add 'that' for clarity.

× My parents umm used to used to bring umm brings my sibling and me on a park in every Sunday and they also bring some games like ball game and we do running in park and playing.

✓ My parents used to bring my sibling and me to a park every Sunday, and they also brought some games like a ball, and we ran and played in the park.

Multiple errors: 'used to used to' is redundant — keep single 'used to' for past habitual actions. 'Brings' should be past 'brought'. Use the preposition 'to a park' not 'on a park'. 'Every Sunday' is preferred over 'in every Sunday'. Add articles: 'a ball'. Use past tense verbs 'brought', 'ran' and 'played' to match past habitual context. Also include 'the park' when referring to the specific place.

× I am regularly visit to park umm after my breakfast because I like to do walking and bike is just a 5 minute walking distance from my home.

✓ I regularly visit the park after my breakfast because I like to go walking, and the bike park is just a five-minute walk from my home.

Do not use 'am' + base verb for simple present; correct to 'I regularly visit'. Use 'visit the park' with definite article. 'To do walking' is awkward; use 'go walking'. 'Bike is just a 5 minute walking distance' is unclear — clarified as 'the bike park is just a five-minute walk'. Spell out numbers below ten in formal writing and use hyphens in compound adjectives ('five-minute').

× So uh, and to become a healthy when I go to the park umm and walk or run, it improves my mood and overall physical.

✓ So, going to the park to walk or run makes me healthier; it improves my mood and my overall physical health.

'To become a healthy' is incorrect: 'healthy' is an adjective and needs to modify a noun; use 'healthier' or 'my health'. 'It improves my mood and overall physical' is incomplete; specify 'overall physical health'. Rephrase to a clearer, natural structure: 'going to the park... makes me healthier'.

× Yeah, I would like to see more parks in my city and would recommend that more parks will be very helpful for individual with health concerns like for example obesity.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks in my city, and I would recommend that more parks would be very helpful for individuals with health concerns, for example obesity.

Using 'will' after 'recommend that' is incorrect in this context; 'would' is more appropriate for hypothetical or polite suggestions. 'Individual' should be plural 'individuals'. Add commas for clarity and 'for example' should be set off by commas.

× There are so many parks in my city and I have visited only uh, I guess umm, 2 to 3 bikes umm so I really want to visit and the other parks and explore new things and like uh, I have seen in reels and Instagram that there are so many parks in Bahia town I also wanted.

✓ There are so many parks in my city, and I have visited only, I guess, two or three of them, so I really want to visit the other parks and explore new things. I have also seen on Reels and Instagram that there are many parks in Bahia Town that I want to visit.

Use 'two or three' instead of '2 to 3' in text and spell out numbers. 'Bikes' is wrong word here; likely 'parks' or 'of them' is intended. Add articles and prepositions: 'visited only two or three of them'. Separate into two clearer sentences. Use 'on Reels and Instagram' (preposition 'on') and correct verb forms 'I want to visit'. Capitalize 'Bahia Town' as a proper noun.