Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), correct verb tenses and prepositions (e.g., 'visit national parks' not 'visit to'), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add one specific detail about memories to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited the national park and a small local park near my hometown, where I played football with my friends and had picnics every weekend.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and fillers. Begin with a direct response, use correct verb forms and prepositions, and give a specific example of activities and frequency. Use a linking phrase (e.g., 'because' or 'so') to explain why you go.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I visit once or twice a week to jog and play badminton with friends because it helps me relax and stay fit.

Suggestion: Make sentences grammatically correct and avoid vague phrases. State your opinion clearly, give 1–2 specific reasons why more parks are needed, and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Remove fillers and fix collocations ('essential part of' → 'an essential part of', 'for recreation for people').

Example: Yes, I would. Parks are an essential part of a city because they improve air quality and provide safe places for families to exercise and relax.

Suggestion: Be specific and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Start with a clear affirmative sentence, name the park and its location briefly, and give two specific reasons you want to visit (e.g., wildlife, hiking trails). Avoid excessive hesitations and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'also').

Example: Yes, I want to visit Mangalore Park in a nearby city because it has large open areas and rich biodiversity. I am especially excited to see the birdlife and try the hiking trails and guided nature walks.

× It's a fun activity where I met with my friends and play a lot of games to get together.

✓ It's a fun activity where I used to meet my friends and play a lot of games to get together.

The original mixes past simple 'met' with present 'play' and uses an incorrect structure for habitual past actions. Use 'used to' + base verb or keep consistent past tense: 'I used to meet' and 'play' (base form after 'used to'). This clarifies that meeting and playing were habitual in the past.

× I would love to visit to the national parks and also my local park, UH, which is situated near my uh hometown.

✓ I would love to visit the national parks and also my local park, which is situated near my hometown.

The verb 'visit' does not require the preposition 'to' before its object. Remove 'to'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Yeah, as, as I mentioned earlier, I love to visit to the park and right now I'm, uh, going occasionally, but you know, it's really important for me to unwind with my friends and, uh, perform some outdoor activities.

✓ Yeah, as I mentioned earlier, I love to visit the park and right now I'm going occasionally, but it's really important for me to unwind with my friends and do some outdoor activities.

Remove extra 'to' after 'love to visit' (see preposition issue) and avoid 'perform' which is awkward here; 'do some outdoor activities' is natural. Also remove repeated fillers and keep present continuous 'I'm going occasionally' consistent.

× Parks are essential part of our environment.

✓ Parks are an essential part of our environment.

The noun phrase needs the indefinite article 'an' before 'essential part' because 'part' is a singular, countable noun.

× So it's better to build, uh, more parks as, as much as possible, uh, in order to create a place for recreation of to these people.

✓ So it's better to build more parks as much as possible in order to create recreational places for these people.

The phrase 'as much as possible' is fine but should not be split by fillers. 'Create a place for recreation of to these people' is ungrammatical: use 'create recreational places for these people' or 'create a place for recreation for these people'. This corrects word order and collocation.

× It's, uh, located, uh, in the another city.

✓ It's located in another city.

Use 'another city' without the definite article 'the' because 'another' already implies an indefinite additional one. Remove fillers for clarity.

× Uh, but uh, it's uh, uh, have a large area and, uh, different kinds of animals and biodiversity and uh, there are also such activities you can do there.

✓ But it has a large area, different kinds of animals and biodiversity, and there are also various activities you can do there.

The subject 'it' requires the verb 'has' (third person singular). Replace 'have' with 'has'. Also improve noun phrases: 'various activities' sounds natural. Remove filler words and correct coordination with commas.