Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조를 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 다듬으세요. 불필요한 중복(예: "different types of photo")와 채우기 어구(예: "uh")를 줄이고, 토픽 문장 다음에 구체적인 예시와 이유를 연결사로 명확히 이어주면 좋습니다. 또한 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different subjects, especially portraits of my parents because they help me preserve family memories. I also like capturing landscapes when I travel because natural scenes often have striking light and colors.

Suggestion: 의미가 모호한 표현과 문법 오류를 고치고 연결사를 사용해 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 'watch a variety in architectures and strange fashion' 같은 표현 대신 'a variety of architecture and distinctive fashion' 등 정확한 명사를 사용하고, 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요.

Example: I prefer urban views because cities offer a variety of architecture and distinctive street fashion that reflect current trends. For example, I enjoy photographing modern buildings and people wearing bold outfits because they tell a story about city life.

Suggestion: 어법 오류와 어색한 어순을 고치고 구체적 이유와 예시를 덧붙이세요. 'a strange a lot of strange things' 대신 'many unusual sights'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 쓰고, 'it's really feels like unique'에서 중복된 조동사 삭제 및 형용사 사용을 바로잡으세요.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they often have many unusual sights and cultural elements that feel unique. For instance, I love photographing traditional markets and local festivals abroad because you rarely see them at home.

× I really enjoy, uh, photographing different types of photo.

✓ I really enjoy photographing different types of photos.

The noun 'photo' should be plural because it refers to multiple kinds; use 'photos'. Also omit the extra comma after 'enjoy' and the filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'different types of photos' to indicate variety.

× I really like taking portraits of my parents to keep memories, and I also like taking photos of landscapes.

✓ I really like taking portraits of my parents to keep memories, and I also like taking landscape photos.

'Photos of landscapes' is not incorrect but 'landscape photos' is more natural and concise in English. 'Keep memories' is understandable but more natural phrases are 'preserve memories' or 'keep memories of them'. Suggestion: say 'to preserve memories' or 'to keep memories of them'.

× I definitely prefer city views because umm, I can watch a variety in architectures and strange fashion which is which reflux the trends of urban areas.

✓ I definitely prefer city views because I can see a variety of architecture and unusual fashions that reflect urban trends.

Multiple issues: 'watch' is wrong verb; use 'see'. 'a variety in architectures' should be 'a variety of architecture' (singular uncountable) or 'architectural styles'. 'strange fashion' should be 'unusual fashions' (plural) and 'which is which reflux' is incorrect; use 'that reflect'. Also remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: 'I can see a variety of architectural styles and unusual fashions that reflect urban trends.'

× I definitely prefer other countries views because there are a strange a lot of strange things but it's really feels like unique and it's hard to commonly see.

✓ I definitely prefer views in other countries because there are a lot of unusual things that feel unique and are hard to see commonly.

Problems: 'other countries views' needs preposition and plural form: 'views in other countries'. 'there are a strange a lot of strange things' is ungrammatical; use 'there are a lot of unusual things' or 'there are many unusual things'. 'it's really feels like unique' mixes subject; 'they really feel unique' or 'it really feels unique' depending on subject. 'hard to commonly see' word order awkward; use 'are hard to see commonly' or better 'are hard to find'. Suggestion: 'I definitely prefer views in other countries because there are many unusual things that feel unique and are hard to find.'