Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer, more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct word choices (e.g., 'her nature' → 'nature'), and keep to 2–4 supporting sentences. Use linking words to structure details (for example, 'When I was in fifth grade, I enjoyed...; since then...'). Also give specific examples (what subjects you photograph, which camera or phone) and describe feelings with clearer adjectives.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I was in fifth grade I often photographed landscapes and the night sky, because I loved the colours and shapes. Since then I usually capture mountains, rivers and sunsets with my smartphone, which helps me remember peaceful moments.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'I prefer rural areas'). Avoid repetition and fillers, and use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'so') to give reasons. Provide specific supporting details about what you like in rural views (fields, quiet streets, fresh air) and how you photograph them (time of day, composition). Keep to 2–4 concise sentences.

Example: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and enjoy the calm atmosphere. For example, I like photographing green fields, quiet village streets and tree-lined paths in the early morning because the light is soft and there are few people around.

Suggestion: Be more confident and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries'), and then give specific reasons and examples. Replace vague phrases ('beautiful scenarios') with concrete descriptions (mountains, lakes, alpine scenery). Use linking words such as 'because', 'for example' and avoid hedging words like 'I guess'.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they offer landscapes different from those at home. For example, I would love to photograph the alpine lakes and snowy peaks in Switzerland and the dramatic fjords and forests of New Zealand, which would contrast with the plains and village scenes I already know.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. Uh, like when I was, uh, in my 5th grade, I used to take pictures of her nature and the sky in the night and uh, I, I used to feel like, uh, it's bold or hard thing, I guess. Yeah, I like pink pictures of the fingers.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. When I was in fifth grade, I used to take pictures of nature and the night sky, and I used to feel that it was a bold or difficult thing, I guess. I especially like close-up photos of fingers.

Problems: incorrect prepositions ('in my 5th grade' should be 'in fifth grade'; 'of her nature' is wrong preposition/pronoun — should be 'of nature'; 'the sky in the night' is more naturally 'the night sky') and awkward noun choices. Suggestions: use 'in fifth grade' without 'my', use 'of nature' to refer generally, and place 'night' before 'sky' for idiomatic English. Replace vague words like 'bold' with 'bold' or 'difficult' and clarify 'pink pictures of the fingers' to 'close-up photos of fingers' if that is the intended meaning.

× I prefer using Ruellyplus because I've grown up in countryside, so I like, uh, calmness and the nature in the countryside, uh, allowed to be walked, uh, or in the streets of village and, uh, green series. I, I love, I love them. Yeah. So that's why I actually do this.

✓ I prefer rural places because I grew up in the countryside, so I like the calmness and the natural environment there. I enjoy walking in the countryside or in village streets and seeing green scenery. I love them, so that's why I do this.

Problems: sentence structure and word choice issues ('using Ruellyplus' is unclear — likely meant 'rural places'; 'I've grown up in countryside' should be 'I grew up in the countryside'; 'the nature in the countryside' -> 'the natural environment there'; 'allowed to be walked' is ungrammatical). Suggestions: rearrange ideas into clear sentences, use 'the countryside' with the definite article, use 'walk' as an active verb 'I enjoy walking', and replace 'green series' with 'green scenery'.

× I prefer using Ruellyplus because I've grown up in countryside, so I like, uh, calmness and the nature in the countryside, uh, allowed to be walked, uh, or in the streets of village and, uh, green series. I, I love, I love them. Yeah. So that's why I actually do this.

✓ I prefer rural places because I grew up in the countryside, so I like the calmness and the natural environment there. I enjoy walking in the countryside or in village streets and seeing green scenery. I love them, so that's why I do this.

Problems: pronoun use is unclear ('them' is vague — clarify the noun it refers to). Suggestions: explicitly repeat the noun ('I love these places' or 'I love the views') instead of using an unclear pronoun, and keep pronoun references close to their antecedents.

× I would like to see the views in other countries because I already know how views are in my country and I would like to explore other countries as well like Switzerland and New Zealand. Uh, I think, uh, they, that countries have a lot of beautiful scenarios, I guess.

✓ I would like to see the views in other countries because I already know what views are like in my country, and I would like to explore countries such as Switzerland and New Zealand. I think those countries have a lot of beautiful scenery, I guess.

Problems: present tense and phrasing issues ('how views are in my country' should be 'what views are like in my country'; 'they, that countries' is incorrect pronoun/demonstrative use). Suggestions: use 'what...are like' to describe characteristics, use 'such as' for examples, replace 'scenarios' with 'scenery' for landscapes, and use 'those countries' to refer back to the mentioned countries.

× I used to feel like, uh, it's bold or hard thing, I guess.

✓ I used to feel that it was a bold or difficult thing, I guess.

Problems: incorrect adjective/adverb and structure ('it's bold or hard thing' is ungrammatical; 'hard' needs 'difficult' and a determiner 'a'). Suggestions: use 'that it was' for past feeling, choose correct adjective 'difficult' instead of 'hard' in this context, and include the article 'a' before 'difficult thing'.