Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid informal colloquialisms like "wanna" and fix small grammar errors (e.g., "in case of I wanna" → "so I can").

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of interesting views. For example, when I see a beautiful sunset I take a picture so I can remember the moment later, and I sometimes share those photos with friends.

Suggestion: Give a direct preference sentence and then add a specific reason with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition like "beautiful, then it's beautiful."

Example: I like both urban and rural views, but I tend to prefer rural scenery because it is quieter and more natural. For instance, I enjoy the open fields and mountain landscapes, while urban views appeal to me when there is interesting architecture or lively streets.

Suggestion: Structure the answer: give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then contrast with a specific example using linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and unclear comparisons; be specific about features of each place.

Example: I enjoy views in both my country and abroad, but I prefer seeing landscapes in other countries because they offer new and different scenery. For example, while my country has lovely beaches and familiar hiking trails, travelling abroad lets me discover mountains and cultural landscapes I haven't seen before.

× I take pictures in case of I wanna look back on it or just for memories.

✓ I take pictures in case I want to look back on them or just for memories.

The phrase 'in case of' is incorrect here; use 'in case' followed by a clause. 'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' (or 'want') in writing. 'It' refers to 'pictures' (plural), so use 'them'. Also avoid contractions like 'wanna' in formal responses. Suggestions: replace 'in case of' with 'in case', use 'want to' or 'want', and match pronoun number to 'pictures'.

× I prefer them both. I'm not really picky when it comes to looking at different views.

✓ I prefer both. I'm not really picky when it comes to looking at different views.

Using 'them' after 'prefer' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here; 'prefer both' correctly expresses the idea. 'Them both' is colloquial; using 'both' alone is more natural. Suggestion: say 'I prefer both'.

× My country is beautiful when it comes to views as well when it's beaches or with the mountains in other countries.

✓ My country is beautiful when it comes to views, whether it's beaches or mountains, but other countries also have beautiful scenery.

The original sentence is confusing and has mixed clauses. Use 'whether' to present alternatives ('beaches or mountains'). Break into two clauses to compare with other countries. Also avoid 'with the mountains in other countries' which mixes subjects. Suggestion: restructure using 'whether' and separate the comparison to other countries.

× It's also beautiful in its own way, especially when you go for a hike or go to a camp or literally just anywhere around in other places in other country.

✓ It's also beautiful in its own way, especially when you go for a hike, go camping, or visit other places in different countries.

This sentence is repetitive and uses awkward phrases ('go to a camp', 'literally just anywhere around in other places in other country'). Use 'go camping' for natural expression and 'different countries' or 'other countries' for clarity. Remove 'literally' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: simplify and use natural collocations like 'go camping' and 'visit other places'.

× That's what makes it beautiful is to see other places.

✓ What makes it beautiful is seeing other places.

The original has a redundant 'That's' and an awkward infinitive structure. Use a cleft sentence 'What makes it beautiful is...' followed by a gerund 'seeing' for a natural, grammatical sentence. Suggestion: use 'What makes it beautiful is seeing other places.'