Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally relevant and shows enthusiasm, but there are several language errors, repetitions, and some unclear word choices (e.g. “photo photograph”, “Saxivo”, “bashots”). To improve: 1) Use a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating words; 2) Correct product names or explain briefly if unsure; 3) Use linking words (for example, because/so) to make the response coherent; 4) Keep to 3–4 concise sentences. Also check basic grammar (verb forms, plurals) and word choice to sound more natural.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Photography is one of my hobbies and helps me relax, so I always bring my Fujifilm instant camera when I travel to print photos and save them digitally. I usually photograph landscapes and cityscapes because they preserve memories and show the atmosphere of a place, and I often upload a few shots to social media to share with family and friends.

Suggestion: Your answer gives a clear preference, but contains many grammar and vocabulary problems that reduce clarity (e.g. “tho those tall city scrapers”, “province areas”, awkward sentence structure). To improve: 1) Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference; 2) Use correct vocabulary (skyscrapers, rural/provincial areas); 3) Provide one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because/and); 4) Avoid fragmented sentences and aim for 2–3 well-formed sentences.

Example: I prefer urban views because tall skyscrapers and busy streets make me feel energetic. Also, cities let me observe people’s daily routines and street life, which I find interesting, so I usually take photos of architecture and candid scenes.

Suggestion: You answer honestly and provide vivid detail about domestic travel, which is good. However, there are grammar issues and wordiness (e.g. “a travel outside”, “every single time that I travel and every single time that I capture”). To improve: 1) Use a clear opening sentence that answers directly (I prefer… / I can’t compare…); 2) Correct grammar (I haven’t traveled abroad); 3) Keep supporting details specific and concise, and use linking words (for example, because/so) to connect ideas; 4) Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I haven’t traveled abroad yet, so I can’t compare, but I really enjoy views in the Philippines. The landscapes here are very picturesque and often leave me in awe, and when I photograph them I try to capture both the scenery and the stories of local people.

× I usually photo photograph landscape and cityscapes because they capture memories and atmosphere, and they often upload bashots to social media to share it with my family and friends.

✓ I usually photograph landscapes and cityscapes because they capture memories and atmosphere, and I often upload shots to social media to share them with my family and friends.

Errors: redundant word 'photo photograph' and incorrect noun forms. 'Photograph' is the correct verb; 'landscapes' should be plural to match general reference (singular/plural agreement, ID 1 also relevant). 'Bashots' is incorrect—use 'shots' and 'upload' subject should be 'I' not 'they'. 'Share it' should be 'share them' to agree with plural 'shots'. Suggestion: remove the duplicate word, use correct verb 'photograph', pluralize 'landscapes', use 'I often upload shots', and match pronoun number.

× Whenever I travel, I bring my Fujifilm in Saxivo so I can print photos in real time and store them digitally.

✓ Whenever I travel, I bring my Fujifilm Instax so I can print photos in real time and store them digitally.

Error: 'Saxivo' appears to be a misspelling of 'Instax' (brand) or a wrong noun; not a grammar category but affects meaning. Pluralization 'photos' is fine. Suggestion: correct the camera name to 'Instax' and keep 'photos' plural. If 'Saxivo' is intended brand use its correct form.

× I prefer views in urban areas because it makes me feel alive seeing tho those tall city scrapers rather than in province areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they make me feel alive seeing those tall city skyscrapers rather than in provincial areas.

Errors: subject agreement and word choice. 'It makes me' should be 'they make me' to agree with plural 'views' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). 'Tho' is a typo for 'those'. 'City scrapers' is incorrect; use 'city skyscrapers'. 'Province areas' should be 'provincial areas'. Suggestion: match plural subject and verb, fix typos and use correct adjective form 'provincial'.

× In urban areas just give me those sense of feeling like observing people on how they act, on how they move on a daily basis.

✓ In urban areas I just get that sense of observing people: how they act and how they move on a daily basis.

Errors: missing subject 'I' and incorrect verb 'give me those sense' should be 'I just get that sense' (subject-verb agreement and article use, ID 22). 'Those sense' mixes plural determiner with singular noun. Also improve style by removing redundant 'like' and combining phrases. Suggestion: include subject, use singular 'that sense', and parallel structure for 'how they act and how they move'.

× I haven't been a travel outside of the Philippines so I cannot really tell it,

✓ I haven't traveled outside of the Philippines, so I can't really say.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase 'been a travel' should be 'traveled' or 'been on a trip'. 'Tell it' is unnatural; use 'say'. Use contraction consistency 'can't'. Suggestion: use present perfect 'haven't traveled' to indicate experience up to now and 'can't really say' for ability to answer.

× but when I travel domestically here in the Philippines, the landscapes are very picturesque which leaves me in awe every single time that I travel and every single time that I capture not just the photos but also the stories of other people.

✓ But when I travel domestically in the Philippines, the landscapes are very picturesque, and they leave me in awe every time I travel and every time I capture not just the photos but also other people's stories.

Errors: tense and subject agreement—'landscapes are... which leaves me' should be 'they leave me' to match plural 'landscapes' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). 'Every single time that I travel' is wordy; simplify to 'every time I travel'. 'Capture not just the photos but also the stories of other people' can be smoothed to 'capture not just the photos but also other people's stories'. Suggestion: ensure plural subject matches verb, reduce redundancy, and use possessive form.