Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid filled pauses ("umm"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "scenic" + concrete nouns) and limit to at most 3–4 short sentences.

Example: Yes, I love photographing landscapes, especially scenic places where water meets land. For example, I enjoy capturing coastal cliffs and calm lakes because the reflections and textures create striking photos. I often visit these spots at sunrise to get warm light and dramatic shadows.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with a clear reason and an example. Use correct grammar ("human creations" not "human creation which of building") and linking words like "because" or "for example." Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer urban views, mainly city skylines, because tall buildings and busy streets create dynamic compositions. For example, I like photographing at dusk when office lights and street movements add contrast and energy to the scene.

Suggestion: Answer directly and be specific about reasons. Avoid vague phrases ("you know") and filler words. Use concrete comparisons and one or two specific examples of places or features you admire. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because many places I visit are cleaner and better preserved. For instance, I admire the well-maintained parks and historic buildings in cities like Kyoto, which contrast with the more crowded, less orderly areas at home.

× Yes, I definitely love photographing the various landscapes and especially the ones where the nature is very scenic and umm, there's the blend of waters and different types of landscapes. Definitely umm the most favorite.

✓ Yes, I definitely love photographing various landscapes, especially those where nature is very scenic and there is a blend of water and different types of terrain. They are my favorite.

The student used 'the various landscapes' and 'the ones where the nature' incorrectly; 'the' should be omitted when speaking generally. 'Those' is more natural than 'the ones' in this context. 'The blend of waters' is unnatural; use singular 'water' or 'a blend of water' and 'different types of terrain' is clearer than repeating 'landscapes'. 'The most favorite' is nonstandard; use 'my favorite' or 'my most favorite' (but 'most favorite' is redundant). Also changed contraction 'there's' to 'there is' for clarity.

× Actually, I love taking pictures of the skyline in urban areas because I feel like the human creation which of building such tall buildings and the entire lifestyle humans have especially.

✓ Actually, I love taking pictures of the skyline in urban areas because I admire human creations, such as tall buildings, and the urban lifestyle in general.

The original sentence uses awkward phrasing 'I feel like the human creation which of building such tall buildings' and misplaced 'especially'. This is an issue with adjective/noun use and sentence structure; 'human creation' should be plural 'human creations' and followed by an example phrase 'such as'. Rewriting into a clear clause fixes meaning and grammar. This aligns with incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure; simplified wording improves fluency.

× Definitely, I would say I prefer the views which are in other countries because, uh, this cities and you know, even the rural areas are very clean and people are very, uh, cautious and they always pay attention on preserving.

✓ Definitely, I would say I prefer views in other countries because the cities and even the rural areas are very clean, and people are careful and pay attention to preservation.

Errors include wrong demonstrative pronoun 'this cities' (should be 'these cities' or simply 'the cities') and awkward phrasing 'pay attention on preserving' which should be 'pay attention to preservation' or 'care about preserving'. 'Cautious' is better as 'careful' here. Correcting pronoun number and preposition use ('on' to 'to') and noun choice clarifies meaning.