Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct verb forms and plural/singular nouns (e.g., "taking pictures of different views").

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I take photos to capture memorable moments and emotions, and I often share the best shots with friends on social media so they can see what I experienced.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly, then give a reason with a specific example. Use correct grammar and linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid unclear phrases and fillers. Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and variety of architecture there. For example, I like photographing busy streets and modern buildings because they offer interesting colors and shapes.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference statement followed by a specific reason and example. Use correct vocabulary ("other countries") and avoid repeating the same phrase. Mention what exactly you want to explore (e.g., culture, buildings, food).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I like discovering different cultures and traditions. For instance, I enjoy photographing local festivals and historic streets abroad to capture unique architecture and traditional costumes.

× I really love taking picture a different view.

✓ I really love taking pictures of different views.

The original sentence has article and countability errors. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking pictures' is the common collocation for photographing multiple scenes. Also the structure requires the preposition 'of' before 'different views'. Use 'different views' (plural) to match the general idea rather than 'a different view'. Suggestion: Use the set phrase 'taking pictures of' and match singular/plural appropriately.

× I think taking picture means memorizing the moment that memorizing the moment at the time and we gonna rewire.

✓ I think taking pictures means memorizing the moment at the time and we can relive it later.

This sentence repeats phrases and uses informal/incorrect verbs. 'Taking pictures' (plural) is correct. 'Memorizing the moment that memorizing the moment' is redundant; replace with 'memorizing the moment' or better 'helps us relive the moment later'. 'Gonna' is informal; use 'can' or 'will' and 'relive' instead of 'rewire'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and informal contractions; choose precise verbs like 'relive' for recalling experiences.

× We can rewrite this moment and can share this value with umm, photos to friends via.

✓ We can relive this moment and share it with friends through photos.

The phrase 'share this value with umm, photos to friends via' is ungrammatical and misplaces adverbs/prepositions. Use 'share it with friends through photos' or 'share these memories with friends via photos'. 'Relive' fits better than 'rewrite'. Suggestion: Place the prepositional phrase 'with friends' after the verb and use 'through' or 'via' before 'photos'.

× As for me, I prefer you in urban areas or since I have raised in rural area.

✓ As for me, I prefer urban areas, although I was raised in a rural area.

The original contains pronoun misuse 'you' and incorrect tense/structure 'have raised in rural area'. Use passive/active correct form 'I was raised in a rural area' and contrast with 'although'. Suggestion: Use 'I was raised' for past passive and include articles 'a rural area'.

× So that's why I only love picture in urban area.

✓ So that's why I only love taking pictures in urban areas.

Missing gerund 'taking' and plural 'pictures' plus missing article/plural for 'urban areas'. 'I only love pictures in urban areas' or better 'I love taking pictures in urban areas'. Suggestion: Use 'taking pictures' and pluralize 'urban areas' or use 'the urban area' depending on meaning.

× Uh, and I love a crowded place. And where do you have a new age period in urban area like Crowder places?

✓ I like crowded places in urban areas, such as busy city centers.

The original mixes questions and statements and uses unclear phrases 'new age period' and 'Crowder places'. Replace with clear noun phrase 'crowded places' and appropriate examples 'busy city centers'. Suggestion: Keep statements concise and use common vocabulary like 'crowded places' or 'busy areas'.

× I prefer other gantry, uh, because my personality was the type of trying out something different, uh, news, uh, something different, new ones, uh, as uh, rather than new share.

✓ I prefer other countries because my personality is the type that likes trying something different and new rather than staying the same.

'Gantry' is likely mispronounced 'country'; 'other countries' needs plural. 'My personality was the type of' uses past tense incorrectly; use present 'is the type that likes'. Remove filler words and clarify 'rather than staying the same'. Suggestion: Use 'other countries' and present tense 'is' to state preferences; avoid filler 'uh' and repeated words.

× So I want to explore some, uh, creative experience, uh, creative experience like, uh, cars tradition.

✓ So I want to explore new creative experiences, such as local customs and traditions.

The phrase repeats 'creative experience' and ends with 'cars tradition' which is unclear. Replace with 'new creative experiences' and give clear examples like 'local customs' or 'cultural traditions'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and provide clear, relevant examples of what you want to explore.