Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. For example, say whether you enjoy landscapes, cityscapes, or cultural scenes and why. Avoid filler words like “uh” and keep to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different places. For example, I like capturing landscapes and cultural scenes because they show local traditions and natural beauty. I often focus on lighting and composition to make my photos more expressive.

Suggestion: Make a direct, concise statement and support it with clear reasons. Use linking words like “because” or “sometimes… because” and avoid repetitions. Mention specific aspects you like about urban or rural scenes and relate them to your projects or training.

Example: It depends on the project. Sometimes I prefer urban scenes because I can capture dynamic street life and architectural details, while other times I choose rural views for their peaceful landscapes and natural light, which suit my fine arts assignments.

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatical reason and finish your thought. Use a complete sentence with a linking word like “because,” and add one specific example to support your preference. Avoid grammar mistakes (e.g., “another countries” → “other countries”) and complete the sentence.

Example: I prefer photographing views in other countries because my city is very crowded and it is hard to find unobstructed scenes. For instance, when I travel I can shoot quiet coastal villages or historic sites without many people in the frame, which matches my aesthetic.

× Yes, uh, I like taking pictures, uh, of, uh, different country or my country.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different countries, including my own country.

The student used the singular 'country' but meant multiple places; this is a preposition/noun number issue. Use the plural 'countries' after 'different' and include 'including' or 'including my own country' for clarity. Remove filled pauses and extra commas for fluency.

× Uh, it's depends on, uh, my project.

✓ It depends on my project.

The phrase 'it's depends' is incorrect because the verb 'depend' must agree with the subject 'it'. Use 'it depends' (third person singular 'depends' with subject 'it'). Remove contractions and filler words for clarity.

× Uh, I graduated Fine Arts university and I have, uh, different, uh, my project, sometimes urban screen, sometimes people, sometimes, umm, rural, uh, screens actually.

✓ I graduated from the Fine Arts university and I have different projects: sometimes urban scenes, sometimes people, and sometimes rural scenes.

Multiple problems: missing preposition 'from' after 'graduated', incorrect article 'the' for the university name, and awkward phrasing 'different, my project'. Also 'screen' is incorrect word choice; 'scenes' fits context. The sentence was run-on and filled with hesitations; break into clear clauses and use plural 'projects' to match 'different'. This fixes preposition, article, noun choice, and sentence structure errors.

× I prefer another countries because of my city is very crowded and when I taking picture there are many people around and. I.

✓ I prefer other countries because my city is very crowded, and when I take pictures there are many people around.

'Another countries' is incorrect: use 'other countries' (plural). The clause 'because of my city is very crowded' incorrectly uses 'because of' with a clause; use 'because' to introduce a clause. 'When I taking picture' lacks the auxiliary 'am' or correct verb form; use 'when I take pictures'. Also remove the trailing fragment 'and. I.' and make sentence complete. This addresses pronoun/quantifier choice and verb form issues.