Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar, and give specific examples. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and long run-on phrases.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph green parks and tree-lined streets when I visit them, and I also take pictures of cafés and busy streets when I go out with friends.

Suggestion: Provide a clear direct answer, fix grammar, and give specific reasons with linking words. Use one or two concise supporting points rather than repeating the same idea.

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because cities look modern and have interesting architecture. For instance, I like seeing high-rise apartment buildings and busy streets, which feel lively and inspiring.

Suggestion: Clarify which you prefer and avoid vague or contradictory language. Give a specific reason and one example. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exploring new places and cultures. For example, I love photographing historic streets and markets abroad because they offer sights I can't see at home.

× Yes of course, I actually prefer taking pictures of different views because I always achieve a lot of picture like a green space or when I go hanging out with friend like a go to coffee.

✓ Yes, of course. I actually prefer taking pictures of different views because I always take a lot of pictures, for example of green spaces or when I go out with friends to have coffee.

The original sentence uses incorrect verbs and pronouns: 'achieve a lot of picture' is wrong; the correct verb is 'take' and the noun should be plural 'pictures'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' when speaking generally. 'Go hanging out with friend like a go to coffee' is ungrammatical and should be 'go out with friends to have coffee'. Also add commas and periods to separate clauses for clarity and correct punctuation.

× Of course I prefer like view in urban areas because in urban areas like very modern and have a lot of apartments look like so expensive and I really like live in apartment so that I actually prefer views in urban areas.

✓ Of course I prefer views in urban areas because they are very modern and have many apartments that look expensive, and I really like living in an apartment, so I actually prefer urban views.

Issues: 'prefer like view' is awkward; use 'prefer views'. 'In urban areas like very modern' misuses 'like' and lacks subject; use 'they are very modern'. 'Have a lot of apartments' is acceptable but 'a lot of' is informal; 'many apartments' is clearer. 'Look like so expensive' should be 'look expensive'. 'I really like live in apartment' needs gerund and article: 'I really like living in an apartment'. Combined clauses with appropriate conjunctions and pronouns improve coherence.

× Of course, definitely. I obviously prefer views in your own in all the countries, because in all the countries have a lot of. Sway I wanted to explore so that I really like in.

✓ Of course. I definitely prefer views in my own country and in other countries because every country has many places I want to explore, so I really enjoy visiting them.

Errors: 'your own in all the countries' uses wrong pronoun; should be 'my own country and in other countries' to match the question. 'Because in all the countries have a lot of.' is missing a subject and object; use 'every country has many places'. Fragment 'Sway I wanted to explore so that I really like in.' is ungrammatical—should be 'places I want to explore, so I really enjoy visiting them.' Overall fix: supply correct pronouns, complete clause subjects and verbs, and clear relative clauses.