Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and correct tense/word form errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one concise supporting detail using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid filler and duplicate words.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, last week as I was returning from work I saw a beautiful sunset, so I quickly took out my phone and photographed it, then posted the photo on my Instagram story.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then add one specific supporting reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and fix prepositions and article use (e.g., 'in urban areas', 'in rural areas', 'a regional place').

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer different scenery from the city. For instance, last month I visited a regional area near Perth and enjoyed the wide open fields and clear coastal views.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid vague or incomplete sentences. Provide one clear reason with specific detail and remove hesitations. Use linking words like 'because' and give an example or brief explanation.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it has many lakes and mountains that I know well. For example, the mountain region near my hometown has dramatic peaks and clear lakes that I often visit for hiking and photography.

× For example, last week when I was getting back from work I saw a really beautiful sunset and I I take out my phone as quickly as possible and took a picture of the sunset and post it on my Instagram story.

✓ For example, last week when I was coming back from work I saw a really beautiful sunset, so I took out my phone as quickly as possible, took a picture of the sunset, and posted it on my Instagram story.

Errors: repetition 'I I'; inconsistent verb tenses and sequence (mixing past and present: 'take out' and 'post' with past 'saw' and 'took'); run-on sentence. Suggestion: Use past simple consistently for completed past actions ('was coming back', 'saw', 'took', 'posted'). Remove duplicate word and add commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× As I'm living in urban areas at the moment, so I would prefer views on rural areas because that would be something new for me.

✓ As I'm living in an urban area at the moment, I would prefer views in rural areas because that would be something new for me.

Errors: 'urban areas' with 'living in' and 'so' is redundant with 'As' (sentence structure); incorrect preposition 'on rural areas' should be 'in rural areas'; article use: 'living in urban areas' sounds odd when referring to where one lives—better 'an urban area' or 'in the city'. Suggestion: Use 'in' for locations and avoid redundant conjunctions; choose singular/plural consistently depending on meaning.

× For instance, last last month when I visited or regional place in Perth, then there was such a beautiful view.

✓ For instance, last month when I visited a regional place in Perth, there was such a beautiful view.

Errors: repeated 'last last'; 'or' is incorrect word choice, use 'a' or 'the' for noun phrase; unnecessary 'then' and awkward word order. Suggestion: Remove duplicate word, replace 'or' with the article 'a', and use simple past ('visited') with 'there was' to describe a past scene.

× As I come from a really beautiful country surrounded by lakes and mountains all over the nation, I would prefer views in my own country over any other country there.

✓ As I come from a really beautiful country surrounded by lakes and mountains, I would prefer views in my own country over those in any other country.

Errors: redundant 'all over the nation' (awkward), incorrect ending 'over any other country there' — unclear pronoun reference. Suggestion: Simplify description and make comparison clear by using 'those in any other country' to refer to 'views' and avoid redundant words.

× There are lots of beautiful scenic views in my country that I that I have. I need to.

✓ There are lots of beautiful scenic views in my country that I have seen and enjoyed.

Errors: repetition 'that I that I'; fragment 'I need to.' is incomplete and unclear. Suggestion: Remove repetition and complete the thought by specifying what you did with the views ('seen and enjoyed') or what you need to do, and avoid leaving sentence fragments.