Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more concise and natural by removing fillers (uh, um), using accurate word choice, and structuring it with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting reasons. Mention a specific example to add detail and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. My country has many heritage sites and ancient buildings, so I like to capture their architectural details with my DSLR because it gives better image quality than a phone.

Suggestion: Directly state your preference, then give coherent, specific supporting points using linking words. Correct inaccuracies (Kolkata is a city, not a building) and avoid repetition. Limit to three sentences maximum.

Example: I like both urban and rural views. Urban areas offer dramatic skylines and skyscrapers that show city life, whereas rural areas have peaceful fields and diverse trees that are great for nature shots.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a concrete example. Avoid vague generalizations like “much more beautiful” and fillers. Mention a particular country or type of scenery you want to photograph to make your answer more convincing.

Example: I prefer visiting other countries for photography because I haven’t travelled much abroad. For example, I’d like to photograph the clean canals and historic architecture in Amsterdam to contrast with the crowded streets I often see at home.

× My country is full of heritage and ancient structures which look aesthetically, uh, very beautiful.

✓ My country is full of heritage and ancient structures which look very beautiful.

Using 'aesthetically very beautiful' is redundant and awkward; 'aesthetically' is an adverb that doesn't fit well before 'very beautiful.' Remove 'aesthetically' to make the sentence natural and concise. Alternatively, use 'aesthetically pleasing' without 'very'.

× So I definitely like to capture, uh, their beauty in a camera.

✓ So I definitely like to capture their beauty with a camera.

The phrase 'in a camera' is incorrect; use the preposition 'with' to indicate the instrument used to capture photos. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I usually prefer a camera over phone because it provides good pixel quality.

✓ I usually prefer a camera over a phone because it provides better image quality.

Use the article 'a' before 'phone' and prefer 'image quality' or 'better image quality' instead of 'good pixel quality.' 'Better' compares camera and phone, which is more appropriate.

× Actually I prefer both.

✓ Actually, I prefer both.

Add a comma after 'Actually' for natural speech punctuation. No grammatical change needed beyond punctuation.

× The views in urban areas are quite different from uh rural areas.

✓ The views in urban areas are quite different from those in rural areas.

The comparative structure requires a noun phrase after 'different from'; 'those in rural areas' correctly references 'views.' Also remove filler 'uh'.

× In urban areas, we can see a lot of uh, tall buildings called called skyscrapers.

✓ In urban areas, we can see a lot of tall buildings called skyscrapers.

Remove repeated word 'called' and the filler 'uh.' The structure 'tall buildings called skyscrapers' is correct once cleaned.

× For example, atmosphere in uh Kolkata which is the most beautiful building to capture.

✓ For example, the atmosphere in Kolkata is very photogenic and a great subject to capture.

Original sentence is fragmented and mixes 'atmosphere' with 'building' incorrectly. 'The atmosphere in Kolkata is very photogenic' corrects meaning. Add article 'the' and remove filler 'uh.'

× And in rural areas, many kinds of tree can be seen and they can be captured.

✓ And in rural areas, many kinds of trees can be seen and captured.

Use plural 'trees' after 'many kinds of' and the passive 'can be seen and captured' flows better without repeating 'they.'

× Actually I prefer both, but I would like to see uh foreign country more because I haven't travelled there much and I have heard that foreign countries are much more beautiful and much more clean than my country.

✓ Actually I prefer both, but I would like to see foreign countries more because I haven't traveled there much and I have heard that foreign countries are much more beautiful and much cleaner than my country.

Use plural 'foreign countries' to match general statement. Use 'cleaner' as comparative adjective. Use American spelling 'traveled' or keep 'travelled' consistently; here corrected to 'traveled.' Remove filler 'uh.'

× That's why I think I will prefer to go foreign to capture more views.

✓ That's why I think I would prefer to go abroad to capture more views.

Use 'go abroad' rather than 'go foreign.' Also 'would prefer' is more natural after 'I think.' This corrects collocation and tense/modal choice.