Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more organized. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “my son solved my taking pictures”) and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use specific details about what kinds of views you like and how photos help you remember them.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photographs help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes so I can remember special family trips, especially moments with my son.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference and support it with coherent reasons linked logically. Avoid contradictory phrases like “urban or less.” Use one or two linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘also’) and provide specific details about what makes urban views appealing (architecture, lights, parks). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer urban views because cities offer interesting architecture and lively street scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing modern buildings and busy markets since they are convenient to access and full of activity.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. State your preference and explain with specific reasons and one example. Replace vague words like “amazing” with precise descriptions (e.g., ‘different architecture, cultures, or landscapes’) and avoid repeating. Use linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘for example.’

Example: I prefer views in other countries because their landscapes and cultures are different from mine. For example, I enjoy photographing foreign architecture and festivals, which offer unique colors and styles that I don’t see at home.

× I like taking pictures of different views because it is amazing for us and memories in the future for me.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they are amazing for me and will be good memories in the future.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural noun 'pictures'; use 'they'. 'For us' is unclear; context implies personal preference so use 'for me'. Also 'memories in the future' is awkward; use 'will be good memories in the future' to indicate future relevance and maintain tense consistency.

× Uh, my son solved my taking pictures, that's all.

✓ Uh, my son helped me with taking pictures, that's all.

The verb 'solved' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'helped'. The original structure is ungrammatical. Replace with 'helped me with taking pictures' to convey assistance. Keep informal filler 'Uh' and the concluding phrase for tone.

× I like urban or less because they are more peaceful, more lively and convenient.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they are more lively, convenient, and accessible.

'Urban or less' is unclear and likely incorrect quantifier usage. 'Prefer' fits the question. 'More peaceful' contrasts rural usually; keep consistent descriptors: 'lively, convenient, and accessible' are typical positive features of urban areas. Reorder adjectives for clarity.

× I like, I prefer, sorry, I prefer other countries because it is amazing.

✓ I prefer other countries because they are amazing.

'It' refers to a singular noun but 'other countries' is plural, so use 'they'. Also remove repetitive fillers for clear spoken response.

× It is different.

✓ They are different.

Again 'it' is singular while referring to 'other countries' (plural); change to 'they are different' to maintain subject-pronoun agreement.

× My countries, uh lo, uh, different, uh, local for traditional dance, I like, I'm I like made different.

✓ My country's local traditional dances are different; I like them.

The original is fragmented and uses incorrect pronouns and verb forms. 'My country's' (singular possessive) or 'My country’s local traditional dances' clarifies the subject; 'are different' uses correct plural agreement, and 'I like them' properly refers to the dances. Remove fillers and incorrect 'made different'.