Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is long and repetitive and has several grammar and word-choice errors. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures. 2) Keep answers concise (max 3–4 short sentences). 3) Use correct grammar (e.g., “a favorite hobby,” “keeps a record,” “changes over time”). 4) Use one or two specific supporting details or an example rather than repeating the same idea. 5) Use linking words (because, so, which) appropriately to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I do. Photography is one of my favorite hobbies because it helps me keep a record of how my surroundings change over time. For example, I take pictures of my neighborhood every season, which allows me to remember small details and notice subtle changes.

Suggestion: Your answer communicates preference but contains grammatical mistakes, unclear phrases and awkward vocabulary (e.g., “huge by diversity,” “astonishing Panama”). To improve: 1) Give a clear topic sentence stating preference. 2) Use accurate adjectives (e.g., “diversity,” “vast sky,” “breathtaking panorama”). 3) Provide one or two specific reasons with linking words. 4) Avoid filler words like “literally” when inappropriate. 5) Keep sentences concise and varied in structure.

Example: I prefer rural views because there is more greenery and open space. The vast sky and wide landscapes create a breathtaking panorama, and photographing them makes me feel relaxed and energized.

Suggestion: Your answer attempts to explain both limited experience and interest in other countries but is unclear and grammatically weak. To improve: 1) Start with a direct statement about your preference or curiosity. 2) Clarify that you haven’t traveled and then give reasons for interest in foreign views. 3) Mention specific examples (correct names and features) and link them with reason words (for example, because, such as). 4) Correct small errors (e.g., “I haven’t been to another country,” “I have seen many places in my country,” “I was inspired by Niagara Falls”).

Example: I haven’t traveled abroad yet, so I mainly know the views of my own country, but I’m very curious about scenery in other countries. For example, I’d love to see Japan’s coastal cliffs and America’s national parks because their landscapes look very different from what I’m used to. I was also inspired by pictures of Niagara Falls and hope to visit one day.

× Yes, photography is also one of my favorite hobby and I love to keep the record of my surroundings by taking pictures because it helps me the way everything is changing or evolving within the time but also help me to know my surrounding more closely and it become automatically my long lasting memory.

✓ Yes, photography is also one of my favorite hobbies, and I love to record my surroundings by taking pictures because it helps me see how everything changes or evolves over time; it also helps me know my surroundings more closely and becomes a lasting memory for me.

The sentence contains incorrect adjective/adverb usage and related form errors: 'favorite hobby' should be plural 'favorite hobbies' because 'one of' requires a plural noun; 'keep the record' is unnatural and should be 'record'; 'helps me the way everything is changing' is ungrammatical and should be 'helps me see how everything changes or evolves'; 'within the time' is incorrect prepositional phrase and should be 'over time'; 'help me to know my surrounding' needs plural 'surroundings' and correct verb form 'helps'; 'it become' needs third person singular present 'becomes'. Suggestion: make nouns agree in number, use natural collocations (record rather than keep the record), use 'see how' for perception clauses, use 'over time' for duration, and ensure subject-verb agreement with third person singular verbs.

× I prefer views in rural areas because these kind of area have lots of green space as well as huge by diversity.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because these kinds of areas have lots of green space as well as great biodiversity.

Errors: 'these kind of area' mixes plural demonstrative with singular noun; correct form is 'these kinds of areas' or 'this kind of area'. 'have' is correct with plural 'areas'. 'huge by diversity' is incorrect word order and word choice; correct phrase is 'great biodiversity' or 'high biodiversity'. Suggestion: match demonstrative and noun number ('these' + plural), use correct collocations ('great biodiversity').

× I can see a huge sky which create astonishing Panama.

✓ I can see a vast sky, which creates an astonishing panorama.

Problems: 'huge sky' is awkward; 'vast sky' or 'wide sky' is better. 'which create' requires third person singular 'creates' because subject 'sky' is singular. 'astonishing Panama' is a misuse of 'Panama' instead of 'panorama'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('panorama') and ensure verb agrees with singular subject.

× So by taking picture of these kind of natural landscape literally energize me.

✓ So taking pictures of these kinds of natural landscapes literally energizes me.

Errors: 'by taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' (plural and gerund use); 'these kind of' should be 'these kinds of' to match plural; 'natural landscape' should be plural to match 'these kinds of'; missing third person singular 'energizes' to match subject 'taking pictures' (gerund phrase treated as singular). Suggestion: use gerund phrases correctly, match number, and use third person singular verb for gerund subjects.

× I feel more enthusiastic.

✓ I feel more enthusiastic.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no correction needed. The sentence appropriately expresses the student's current feeling. No further change required.

× I have never been to any other country.

✓ I have never been to any other country.

This present perfect sentence is appropriate to express life experience up to now; no tense correction needed.

× I already have seen my country in very much.

✓ I have already seen a lot of my country.

Original has awkward word order and incorrect adverb placement: 'already have seen' is acceptable but unnatural order; 'in very much' is incorrect. Use 'have already seen a lot of my country' or 'I have seen much of my country.' Suggestion: place 'already' before main verb and use 'a lot of' or 'much of' to express extent.

× So I am interested to see the view in other country because I feel awestruck by seeing lots of landscape in Japan as well as in America.

✓ So I am interested in seeing the views in other countries because I feel awestruck by the landscapes in Japan and America.

Problems: 'interested to see' should be 'interested in seeing'; 'the view in other country' needs plural 'views in other countries' or 'a view in another country'; 'lots of landscape' is awkward — use 'landscapes' or 'many landscapes'; 'in Japan as well as in America' can be simplified to 'in Japan and America'. Suggestion: use 'interested in doing' construction, pluralize nouns appropriately, and prefer natural collocations like 'landscapes'.

× Moreover, I was hugely inspired by Nigeria fall I really.

✓ Moreover, I was really inspired by the Nigerian fall.

Issues: word order and missing articles/pronoun connectors make the sentence confusing. 'Nigeria fall' should be 'the Nigerian fall' or 'the fall in Nigeria'; 'I really' is misplaced — 'really inspired' is correct. Suggestion: place adverb 'really' before the past participle 'inspired', include the definite article if referring to a specific season or event ('the Nigerian fall'), and maintain clear subject-verb order.