Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition (e.g., “different beautiful views” and “lovely moments” convey the same idea). Use a stronger verb than “record” and omit filler words like “umm.”

Example: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit a coastal town I photograph the shoreline at sunset because the changing light creates vivid colors that remind me of the trip.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct topic sentence and support it with a specific reason and example. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and avoid repetition of “prefer.” Correct subject-verb agreement and remove vague words like “annoying,” replacing them with concrete reasons (noise, crowding).

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because natural landscapes help me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking through quiet fields and listening to birdsong, which is much calmer than the noise and crowds in a city.

Suggestion: Give a clear comparison and explain what specifically attracts you to European views. Avoid vague placeholders like “MMM” and fix grammar (use “are” for plural). Add one concrete detail (architecture, mountains, culture) to support your preference.

Example: The views in my country are wonderful, but I prefer those in European countries because I admire their historic architecture and diverse landscapes. For example, I love the combination of old town streets and nearby mountains in places like Prague.

× I always want to umm, record the different beautiful views and umm, remember the lovely moments forever.

✓ I always want to, umm, record the different beautiful views and, umm, remember the lovely moments forever.

No major grammar error; only punctuation and fluency: add commas to reflect hesitation but keep verbs parallel. The verbs 'record' and 'remember' are correct forms after 'want to'. Improve by pausing with commas to sound natural.

× I prefer the view in rural areas because I prefer the natural areas that makes me feel relaxed and unwind so and the urban areas that's too annoying.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I prefer natural places that make me feel relaxed and help me unwind, whereas urban areas are too noisy and annoying.

Errors: plural/singular and subject-verb agreement: 'view in rural areas' should be 'views in rural areas' (plural) and 'that makes' should be 'that make' to agree with plural 'natural places'. 'Unwind' needs 'help me' to be grammatical. 'the urban areas that's' is incorrect: use 'urban areas are'. Also 'annoying' is better paired with 'noisy' for clarity. Suggestions: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number; match verb forms and use linking verbs like 'help' for infinitives.

× I believe the views in my country is wonderful, but I prefer the views in the country of Europe because I really like the MMM.

✓ I believe the views in my country are wonderful, but I prefer the views in European countries because I really like the MMM.

Error: 'the views... is' uses singular verb 'is' with plural subject 'views'; it should be 'are'. 'the country of Europe' is awkward and singular; better: 'European countries' or 'countries in Europe'. Suggestion: make sure verb agrees with subject number and choose natural noun phrases for regions.