Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating you enjoy taking photos, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., landscapes, scenery) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes on vacation because the scenery is varied and inspiring. For example, I often capture mountains at sunrise and coastal views at sunset, which create dramatic photos. Overall, taking pictures helps me remember places and improve my photography skills.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with two specific reasons using linking words (because, furthermore). Avoid colloquial fillers and slightly refine vocabulary (e.g., ‘crowds’ not ‘crowds near you’; ‘traffic congestion’). Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer rural areas because they offer breathtaking scenery and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, there are usually fewer crowds and less traffic, so I can take photos without distractions. Additionally, the natural light and open spaces make compositions easier and more attractive.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion (both/own country/other countries) and then give specific reasons with linking words (however, although, because). Use precise nouns instead of vague phrases like ‘different stuff’ and correct grammar (e.g., ‘in Kazakhstan’). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Both my country and other countries have great views, but for different reasons. Although Kazakhstan has stunning mountains and lakes, domestic tourism is less developed, so some sites are hard to access. Therefore, I also enjoy visiting other countries because popular tourist areas often have better facilities and more varied cultural scenery.

× I think in rural areas, 'cause it has some breathtaking views and there is no noise, there is no crowds near you and in urban areas there is often traffic jams.

✓ I think in rural areas, because they have some breathtaking views and there is no noise, there are no crowds near you, while in urban areas there are often traffic jams.

Errors: incorrect use of definite article and agreement with count noun 'crowds' and subject-verb agreement. 'Rural areas' is plural so use 'they have' not 'it has'. 'There is no crowds' is wrong because 'crowds' is plural; use 'there are no crowds'. 'Traffic jams' is plural so use 'there are often traffic jams'. Suggestion: match singular/plural subjects with correct verbs and use 'because' instead of informal ''cause' for formal speech; use 'while' or 'whereas' to contrast.

× Umm, there is so much noise, so much smell and I don't like taking pictures of it.

✓ Umm, there is so much noise and such a bad smell, and I don't like taking pictures of them.

Errors: incorrect agreement between countable/plural nouns and pronouns. 'Smell' in this context should be 'such a bad smell' or 'so many smells' and the pronoun referring back to 'noise and smell' should be plural 'them'. Suggestion: use consistent noun forms and match pronoun number to the nouns they replace.

× I think my country is full of so many beautiful views, from mountains to different lakes, different umm uh and different stuff.

✓ I think my country is full of so many beautiful views, from mountains to various lakes and other attractions.

Errors: awkward and imprecise word choice ('different umm uh and different stuff') and article use before 'mountains'/'lakes' is fine but phrasing needs refinement. Suggestion: replace vague filler words with specific nouns like 'various lakes' and 'other attractions' for clearer, grammatical expression.

× But tourism is not much popular in the Kazakhstan, so I think in another countries is more interesting.

✓ But tourism is not very popular in Kazakhstan, so I think other countries are more interesting.

Errors: incorrect use of definite article 'the Kazakhstan' (country names like Kazakhstan do not take 'the'), wrong adverb 'much popular' (use 'very popular' or 'not popular'), incorrect preposition and singular/plural agreement in 'in another countries is' (should be 'other countries are'). Suggestion: omit 'the' before country names, use 'very' for adjective modification, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('countries are').