Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Pronunciation and grammar: say "I like taking pictures of different views" and avoid "download my videos" if you mean photos; use "post" for social media. Replace filler words (uh, um) with short pauses.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of landscapes and interesting cityscapes because they capture the atmosphere of a place. For example, I often photograph sunrise over fields to show the colours, and then I post the best images on Instagram so my friends can see them.

Suggestion: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give one clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Watch word choice: use "lighting" not "lightning," and avoid repeating phrases. Keep sentences compact and natural.

Example: I prefer urban views because the architecture and city lights create dramatic scenes. For example, I like photographing skyscrapers at dusk because the artificial lighting highlights shapes and reflections, which makes images more exciting.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain why with a specific comparison. Correct grammar: say "I live in a village with old buildings, so I prefer photos of other countries" and use "post" instead of "upload them... than every can." Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas.

Example: I prefer views from other countries because they often have modern architecture and diverse landscapes. For instance, I enjoy posting photos of European city skylines and tropical beaches since they contrast with my village's old buildings and attract more interest on social media.

× Absolutely yes, with taking pictures I can, I can get lots of uh, different views like landscapes or uh, some attracting views and I often, uh, uh, download my videos on social media that my friends can also see and enjoy the beauty. Yeah, photographing is a very, uh, interesting.

✓ Absolutely. By taking pictures, I can get lots of different views like landscapes or some attractive scenes, and I often upload my photos to social media so my friends can also see and enjoy the beauty. Photographing is very interesting.

The original uses 'with taking pictures' which is an incorrect prepositional structure; 'by taking pictures' or gerund phrase without 'with' is correct. 'Attracting views' is incorrect adjective use; 'attractive scenes' or 'attractive views' is appropriate. 'Download my videos on social media' is wrong verb choice and preposition; 'upload my photos to social media' is correct. 'Photographing is a very, uh, interesting' has an unnecessary article and filler; 'very interesting' is correct. Suggestion: use 'by + gerund' to express means, choose correct adjective forms, and use 'upload to' for sharing online.

× From my perspective, urban areas are, uh, better because people can see and enjoy the, uh, beauty of the high rise buildings because, uh, it's very beautiful and you can get a picture with some lightning that, uh, that can give your picture a bit more beauty and, uh, a bit more exciting.

✓ From my perspective, urban areas are better because people can see and enjoy the beauty of the high-rise buildings; they are very beautiful, and you can get a picture with some lighting that can make your picture a bit more beautiful and a bit more exciting.

Problems include 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as an adjective, 'lightning' (electrical discharge) is incorrect for 'lighting' (illumination), and the sentence had awkward pronoun references and adjective/adverb misuse: 'a bit more exciting' needs to modify 'picture' via 'more exciting' but 'a bit more exciting' is okay when parallelized with 'more beautiful'. Also 'it's' referred to buildings (plural), so changed to 'they are'. Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement for plurals and pick correct noun ('lighting') and use parallel adjective forms.

× To be honest, as I live in a village, uh, with some old places and old uh, buildings, I like pictures of other countries and I I often upload them on social media than every can. Everyone can see this because in other countries there are lots of high rise buildings and landscapes that appeals most people.

✓ To be honest, since I live in a village with some old places and old buildings, I prefer pictures of other countries, and I often upload them to social media so everyone can see them. In other countries, there are lots of high-rise buildings and landscapes that appeal to most people.

Multiple errors: 'as' used for reason is acceptable but 'since' is clearer. 'Upload them on social media than every can' is ungrammatical; correct is 'upload them to social media so everyone can see them' (correct preposition and pronoun reference). 'High rise' should be 'high-rise' as adjective. 'That appeals most people' is wrong: verb agreement and missing preposition; correct is 'that appeal to most people' because 'that' refers to plural 'buildings and landscapes' so use plural verb 'appeal' and include 'to'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns refer to the correct noun, use 'to' after 'upload', maintain subject-verb agreement, and include 'to' with 'appeal'.