Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example. Avoid repetitive phrases like "appreciating different views" and "memorize them forever" — instead use natural collocations (e.g., "capture memories"). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and use a linking word if adding a second point.

Example: Yes, I do. I like taking photos because they help me capture special moments and the atmosphere of a place. For example, when I visit a new city I photograph street scenes and landmarks so I can remember how it felt to be there.

Suggestion: Give a clearer topic sentence and expand with one concrete detail. Remove fillers like "umm" and "uh" and correct grammar (e.g., "suits me very well" → "suits me"). Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the dramatic skyline of skyscrapers. For instance, I like walking in the financial district at sunset when the glass buildings reflect light and create an exciting, modern atmosphere.

Suggestion: Make the statement more fluent and specific. Avoid repetition and correct phrases (e.g., "our country doesn't have"). Give a concrete example of a view you can only see abroad. Keep it to two or three sentences and use a linking word like "because" or "for example."

Example: I prefer views in other countries because you can see landscapes or architecture that we don't have at home. For example, I admire visiting alpine villages or ancient temples abroad, which offer styles and scenery completely different from what I usually see.

× I enjoy appreciating different views and I also think taking pictures of them is really a good chance to memorize them forever.

✓ I enjoy appreciating different views and I also think taking pictures of them is really a good way to remember them forever.

Using 'a good chance to memorize' is awkward and unidiomatic. 'Memorize' is correct but here 'remember' is the more natural verb; 'a good way to remember' uses a correct noun phrase with the gerund 'to remember' functioning as the verb complement. Suggest using 'a good way to remember' for natural expression and correct verb form usage.

× I think the modern atmosphere is, uh, suits me very well.

✓ I think the modern atmosphere, uh, suits me very well.

The original sentence mistakenly combines 'is' with the verb 'suits', causing a subject-verb structure error. Remove the unnecessary 'is' so the subject 'the modern atmosphere' directly takes the verb 'suits' in third person singular. Ensure subject and verb agree and avoid stacking verbs without conjunctions.

× I prefer views in other countries because there are some kinds of views that our countries that our country doesn't have.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because there are some kinds of views that our country doesn't have.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'our countries that our country', which is a redundancy and structural error. Remove the extra words to make the relative clause clear: 'views that our country doesn't have.' This fixes the sentence structure and improves clarity.

× So we have to go to other countries and appreciate those, umm, special views.

✓ So we have to go to other countries and appreciate those special views.

The use of commas around 'umm' is acceptable in speech transcripts, but in a corrected sentence the filler should be removed for clarity. Removing 'umm' and the extra comma yields a grammatically correct, fluent sentence. The verb 'appreciate' correctly follows the object; no tense change is needed.