Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, use correct tense and vocabulary, avoid repetition, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Mention specific aims (e.g., capturing detail vs drama) and describe the lenses accurately. Use linking words (for example, and, so) to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like capturing both fine details and dramatic scenes. For example, I use a wide-angle lens to photograph landscapes and a telephoto lens to isolate subjects and blur the background. This combination helps me create varied and expressive images.

Suggestion: Improve grammar, fluency and coherence: open with a clear topic sentence, correct collocations (e.g., ‘hustle and bustle of big cities’, ‘go on a vacation’), remove filler words, and provide one or two specific examples of rural scenes. Use linking words (for instance, therefore, because) to connect reasons and examples.

Example: I prefer rural areas because I like escaping the hustle and bustle of big cities. For instance, I often go to the countryside on vacation to enjoy tranquil scenery such as breathtaking mountains and quiet ocean views, which are free from large crowds.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct comparisons and idioms, avoid hesitations, and use accurate expressions. Start with a direct statement, give a specific reason (e.g., quality of beaches, local food), and include a short example. Replace informal or unclear phrases like ‘charge my battery by’ with natural expressions (recharge my energy with).

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful beaches and wonderful local cuisine. After a day at the beach, I can recharge my energy by trying fresh seafood at excellent local restaurants, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

× Yes, I'm a big fan of taking photo in different views because I want to create the detail, both detail and dramatic photo.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of taking photos of different views because I want to create detailed and dramatic photos.

The sentence uses 'taking photo' (singular) but the activity generally takes plural 'photos' so use plural noun; also use 'taking photos of' rather than 'taking photo in'. 'the detail, both detail and dramatic photo' is ungrammatical: use adjective 'detailed' to modify 'photos' and plural 'photos'. Use parallel structure 'detailed and dramatic photos'.

× I had a camera with two lenses, 1A wide angle lenses to capture the landscape and protest lenses to capture the object and blur.

✓ I have a camera with two lenses: a wide-angle lens to capture the landscape and a portrait lens to capture subjects and create background blur.

Tense should match present context ('had'->'have'). '1A' seems a typo; 'wide angle lenses' combines singular/plural incorrectly: if there are two lenses, each is singular, so 'a wide-angle lens' and 'a portrait lens'. 'protest lenses' likely intended 'portrait lens'. Clarify 'capture the object and blur' to 'capture subjects and create background blur'. Also add hyphen in 'wide-angle'.

× I definitely prefer rural area because I want to get away from hustle and bustle a big cities.

✓ I definitely prefer rural areas because I want to get away from the hustle and bustle of big cities.

Use plural 'rural areas' for general preference. Include definite article 'the' with 'hustle and bustle' and use preposition 'of' before 'big cities'. The original word order 'hustle and bustle a big cities' is incorrect.

× I often choose the countryside and my destination vacation.

✓ I often choose the countryside as my vacation destination.

The phrase 'my destination vacation' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'vacation destination'. Also use 'as' to link choice to role: 'choose the countryside as my vacation destination'.

× I want to shock up uh tranquil scenery such as the uh breathtaking mountain and stunning ocean view without dealing with crowd.

✓ I want to seek out tranquil scenery such as breathtaking mountain and stunning ocean views without dealing with crowds.

'shock up' is incorrect; likely intended 'seek out'. Remove filler 'uh'. Use plural 'views' for generality and plural 'crowds'. 'breathtaking' is an adjective, keep it before 'mountain' but use 'mountain views' or 'mountains'. Also 'dealing with crowd' should be 'dealing with crowds'.

× I definitely prefer views in my country because my own country has a lot of beautiful beaches than any country's ever been.

✓ I definitely prefer views in my country because my country has more beautiful beaches than any other country.

Comparative structure was incorrect. Use 'more... than' to compare quantities: 'has more beautiful beaches than any other country'. Remove contraction 'country's ever been' which is ungrammatical here.

× After a long day in beach, I can charge my battery by the fresh, uh seafood at any excellent local restaurants.

✓ After a long day at the beach, I can recharge my batteries with fresh seafood at any excellent local restaurant.

Use preposition 'at the beach' not 'in beach'. 'Charge my battery' is idiomatic for devices; for oneself use 'recharge my batteries' (idiom meaning refresh energy). Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'with fresh seafood' and singular 'restaurant' or plural 'restaurants' consistently; choose singular 'restaurant' here. Also remove extra comma.