Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), reduce repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct awkward phrasing such as “put it on a record.”

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often walk to nearby parks with my camera to capture early-morning light and reflections on ponds, which I later organize into a digital album.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for instance, and therefore) and avoid vague phrases like “a feeling like a home.” Remove fillers.

Example: I prefer rural views because they combine traditional village houses with wide natural landscapes. For instance, rolling green fields and wooden cottages create a peaceful atmosphere, so I find rural scenes more relaxing than busy cityscapes.

Suggestion: Avoid hesitating and give a clearer, structured response. Use a conditional phrase or contrast connector (e.g., ‘it depends because…’ or ‘however’) and provide one specific contrastive example for each case. Reduce repetition and fix grammar (e.g., ‘in other countries’).

Example: It depends on the type of view: I prefer natural landscapes in my own country because of its rugged mountains and green valleys, but I admire urban skylines abroad—for example, Seoul’s modern architecture and illuminated streets are striking at night.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I have a camera and I like to explore around with my camera and I like the nature and good, umm, beautiful scene, uh, scene sceneries.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I have a camera and I like exploring with it, and I like nature and beautiful scenery.

Repeated 'like to' + verb is acceptable but using 'exploring' (verb + -ing) after 'like' is more natural; 'explore around with my camera' is awkward, so 'exploring with it' is concise. 'the nature' is incorrect article use with 'nature', and 'scene sceneries' is redundant and uncountable; use 'scenery' (uncountable). Use present simple for habits. Suggestion: Use 'like' + gerund for general preferences and avoid redundant nouns.

× I like taking pictures and umm, put it on a record.

✓ I like taking pictures and putting them on record.

After 'like taking pictures and...' the parallel form requires a gerund 'putting'. 'put it on a record' has wrong object agreement and awkward preposition; 'putting them on record' or 'recording them' is better. Use plural 'them' to match 'pictures'. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure and match pronouns with their antecedents.

× I prefer views in rural areas because it has more of a feeling like a home and because there are beautiful sceneries of village houses and also the nature combined together.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they have more of a homely feeling, with beautiful village houses and nature combined.

The subject 'views' is plural, so the verb should agree: use 'they have' not 'it has'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect; use 'scenery' or 'views'. 'the nature combined together' is awkward; 'nature combined' or 'nature together' is clearer. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with the subject number and choose correct countable/uncountable nouns.

× So it's a very beautiful, uh, view altogether.

✓ So it's a very beautiful view overall.

Use 'overall' instead of 'altogether' for summarizing, and avoid unnecessary comma. 'Very beautiful' is acceptable but 'quite beautiful' or 'truly beautiful' can sound more natural. Suggestion: Use appropriate adverbs for tone and remove fillers.

× In my own country, uh, views of nature and umm, beautiful landscapes are more beautiful.

✓ In my own country, views of nature and beautiful landscapes are more beautiful.

This sentence mainly has redundancy ('are more beautiful' repeated); however preposition use is fine. Correction removes filler words only; keep present simple. Suggestion: Avoid fillers and redundant phrasing: 'views of nature and beautiful landscapes are more attractive' if comparative needed.

× And in other country like uh, South Korea, uh, views of the city is more beautiful.

✓ And in other countries like South Korea, city views are more beautiful.

Use plural 'countries' after 'other' and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'views' plural requires 'are' not 'is'. 'views of the city' is better as 'city views'. Also remove fillers. Suggestion: Match singular/plural forms and remove unnecessary articles.

× So it really depends.

✓ So it really depends on the place.

The original sentence is grammatically correct but incomplete; adding 'on the place' clarifies what 'it' refers to. Suggestion: Make references explicit to avoid ambiguity.