Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more coherent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fragmented phrases and unclear references. Also correct grammar (e.g., tense and word order) and avoid repeating phrases.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of views because they help me remember places. For example, when I visit a beach or a mountain, I take photos to capture the light and atmosphere, which later brings back the memory of how the place felt.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Fix grammar and sentence endings, and explain exactly what attracts you to rural views (e.g., natural features, tranquility).

Example: I prefer photographing rural areas because there are fewer tall buildings and more natural scenery. For instance, I like capturing fields, forests and rivers since the open space and quiet atmosphere create more interesting compositions.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid vague or odd phrases. State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons and an example. Correct awkward expressions (e.g., “having a look on this guy” is unclear). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with the landscapes and feel comfortable there. For example, I love watching the clear skyline at sunset in my hometown, which helps me relax after a busy day.

× 'Well yes, I do like taking pictures of views as I wanted to be. Warm and cozy. Also a picture taking pictures could help me remember places.'

✓ 'Well, yes, I do like taking pictures of views because they make me feel warm and cozy. Also, taking pictures can help me remember places.'

'Original sentences are fragmented and unclear. "as I wanted to be" is an incorrect clause here and breaks sentence structure; "Warm and cozy." is a fragment; "Also a picture taking pictures" is ungrammatical. The correction combines ideas into complete sentences, uses a clear subordinating conjunction (because) to show reason, changes the noun phrase to the plural pronoun "they" to refer back to "views," and simplifies the second idea to "taking pictures can help me remember places." Suggestion: combine related ideas into full sentences, ensure each sentence has a subject and verb, and use conjunctions to show relationships.'

× 'I prefer taking pictures in rural areas at it doesn't have such big buildings and it doesn't break my view as.'

✓ 'I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because they do not have such big buildings and they do not obstruct my view.'

'Original sentence uses "at" incorrectly to introduce a reason and ends with "as" incorrectly. Also "it" is singular while referring to plural "rural areas." The correction replaces "at" with the subordinating conjunction "because" to introduce the reason, uses plural pronoun "they" to agree with "rural areas," and replaces "break my view" with the more natural "obstruct my view." Suggestion: use appropriate conjunctions for reasons (because, since), ensure pronouns match the noun number, and choose idiomatic verbs.'

× 'In my opinion, I prefer views in my own country as it provides a great skyline with a beautiful and cozy view of clear sky that could help me relax by having a look on this guy.'

✓ 'In my opinion, I prefer views in my own country because they provide a great skyline and a beautiful, cozy clear sky that helps me relax when I look at it.'

'Original sentence incorrectly uses singular pronoun "it" to refer to the plural "views," and contains awkward phrases like "having a look on this guy." The correction makes pronoun number agree (they provide), improves noun phrases (a beautiful, cozy clear sky), and replaces the odd phrase with "when I look at it" to express the action clearly. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match their antecedents in number, avoid informal or unclear expressions, and simplify to natural collocations.'