Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and two brief supporting details. Reduce filler words (umm, uh) and correct small grammar issues (use plurals and articles correctly). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas (for example, and also). Add a specific detail to make the content more informative (where/when you take photos, why you like them).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. I especially like nature scenes, such as flowers and trees, because I find their colors calming. I also enjoy photographing historic sites like the Kalat fortress, as they tell interesting stories about the past.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two coherent reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid contradictory descriptions (urban = more natural is confusing); choose accurate vocabulary (green spaces, cityscape). Reduce repetition and fillers, and correct grammar (use 'they make me feel' not 'it make you').

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because many cities have well-maintained parks and riverfronts. For example, I enjoy walking along tree-lined streets and visiting rooftop gardens, which help me relax. These city green spaces are good for my mental health.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence (I prefer both) then give two specific reasons, connected by linking words (because, also). Avoid vague phrases like 'my country is there for me' and unclear references (New York folklore). Provide concrete examples of what you gain from foreign views (architecture, food, traditions).

Example: I like views in both my own country and abroad. At home I appreciate familiar landscapes and local traditions, while traveling I enjoy seeing different architecture and cultural scenes, such as the skyline of New York or traditional festivals, which broaden my perspective.

× Yeah, actually I do love taking pictures, especially the flowers, the trees like natural things, for example, at the world flowers in my umm, best thing to do.

✓ Yeah, actually I do love taking pictures, especially of flowers and trees and other natural things; for example, at the World Flower Show it is my favorite thing to do.

The sentence misuses articles and pronouns and omits prepositions. 'Taking pictures, especially the flowers' needs the preposition 'of' to indicate the object of 'taking pictures'. 'The trees like natural things' is ungrammatical; coordinate nouns should be joined with 'and' and described as 'other natural things'. 'At the world flowers' should be 'at the World Flower Show' (proper noun capitalization) and needs a clearer clause: 'it is my favorite thing to do.' Suggestion: include required prepositions ('of'), join nouns correctly ('and'), capitalize proper nouns, and use a clear subject and verb for the final clause.

× And I do actually love taking pictures of like ancient places, uh, for example, the Kalat.

✓ And I actually love taking pictures of ancient places; for example, the Kalat.

The filler 'do' plus 'actually' is acceptable colloquially but the phrase 'of like ancient places' contains an unnecessary filler 'like'. Remove 'like' for grammatical clarity. No change to verb forms is needed beyond removing the filler. Ensure punctuation separates clauses. Suggestion: avoid filler words ('like', 'uh') in formal answers and remove redundant prepositions.

× I actually prefer in urban areas because it's more natural and you will you'll feel unwind in instance like in a thick umm it make you feel like better.

✓ I actually prefer urban areas because they feel more natural, and you feel more relaxed there; for instance, being in a park makes you feel better.

The original has incorrect and missing prepositions and pronouns: 'prefer in urban areas' should be 'prefer urban areas' or 'prefer being in urban areas'. 'It's more natural' is vague—use 'they feel more natural' to refer to areas. 'You will you'll feel unwind' is ungrammatical; use 'you feel more relaxed' (adjective not verb). 'In instance like in a thick' is broken; use 'for instance, being in a park' or similar. 'It make you feel like better' should be 'it makes you feel better' subject-verb agreement and remove extra 'like'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions, proper adjective 'relaxed', ensure subject-verb agreement, and avoid fillers.

× I don't know what's the reason but I feel like relaxed especially my mental health.

✓ I don't know the reason, but I feel relaxed, especially in terms of my mental health.

'What's the reason' is colloquial but acceptable; better is 'I don't know the reason.' 'I feel like relaxed' is incorrect: after 'feel' use the adjective 'relaxed' without 'like', or 'feel like' + noun/verb. Also 'especially my mental health' lacks a preposition—use 'especially in terms of my mental health' or 'especially for my mental health.' Suggestion: remove 'like' before adjectives, add appropriate prepositional phrase to modify 'especially'.

× Actually both of them, because my country is there for me and I do like traveling to other places and seeing different cultures, new things for me like umm, New York folklore.

✓ Actually both, because my country is home to me, and I like traveling to other places and seeing different cultures and new things, for example, New York's culture.

The phrase 'both of them' is awkward when referring to 'views in your own country or in other countries'—use 'both'. 'My country is there for me' is idiomatic but better as 'my country is home to me'. 'New things for me like umm, New York folklore' is unclear: 'New York folklore' is odd; likely intended 'New York's culture' or 'New York's attractions.' Use possessive form for clarity. Suggestion: replace vague idioms with clear expressions ('home to me'), use conjunctions correctly, and choose accurate nouns for cultural references.

× It helped me like uh, see different things from what I have used to see.

✓ It helped me to see different things from what I was used to seeing.

The phrase 'have used to see' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'was used to seeing' or 'I used to see' depending on meaning. Here 'helped me to see different things from what I was used to seeing' conveys that travel exposed the speaker to new experiences. Also remove filler words ('like uh'). Suggestion: use 'was used to' + gerund for habitual past situations and include the infinitive marker 'to' after 'helped' if needed.