Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, correct grammar (e.g., 'taking pictures' plural, article use), and give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if adding detail.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I like experimenting with various angles to capture interesting lines and lighting, which often makes ordinary scenes look more dramatic.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct statement, remove filler words, and provide a specific reason and example. Use a linking word to connect the reason to the preference.

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer natural scenery and vibrant forests. For instance, I enjoy hiking in woodlands where the variety of plants and peaceful atmosphere create more visually appealing photographs.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, avoid confusing phrasing and fillers, and explain with a clear reason and example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'scenes' not 'fears') and a linking word to make the explanation coherent.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they often have different landscapes and cultural settings. For example, visiting coastal towns abroad gave me opportunities to photograph colourful markets and seaside views that we don’t have at home.

× I generally like the process and the results of taking picture from different angles.

✓ I generally like the process and the results of taking pictures from different angles.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it refers to multiple items (plural context). This is a pluralization issue but falls under verb + -ing form and noun number interplay here; correct form: 'taking pictures' uses the gerund 'taking' with the plural noun. Suggestion: use 'pictures' whenever referring to more than one image.

× Uh, uh, the images and the results, uh, come out resplendent be.

✓ Uh, the images and the results come out resplendent.

The phrase 'resplendent be' is ungrammatical; the verb 'come out' should be followed by an adjective without adding 'be'. Remove filler 'be' and extra pauses for clarity. Suggestion: say 'come out resplendent' or 'turn out resplendent'.

× Well, uh, from my perspective and, uh, rural areas which provide the nature, the forests are much vibrant and they are visually appealing and just beautiful.

✓ Well, from my perspective, rural areas that have natural features and forests are much more vibrant; they are visually appealing and beautiful.

The original has fragmented structure and incorrect connectors ('and' misplaced) and awkward phrase 'provide the nature'. Use 'that have' or 'with' to link 'rural areas' to natural features. Also use comparative 'more vibrant' for clarity and remove redundancy. Suggestion: simplify clauses and use commas to separate ideas.

× Well, I said that what other countries? Mainly because my country has more urban areas and that offers not really vibrant angles and fears.

✓ Well, I meant other countries, mainly because my country has more urban areas, which do not offer very vibrant views.

The original misuses 'I said that what other countries?' which is unclear; 'I meant other countries' is correct. 'That offers' incorrectly refers to 'areas' (plural) so use 'which do not offer'. 'Not really vibrant angles and fears' is wrong vocabulary: 'angles' is odd and 'fears' is incorrect—use 'views'. Also change adverb placement to 'not very vibrant' or 'do not offer very vibrant views'. Suggestion: replace unclear pronoun references, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct nouns ('views').