Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear phrases, correct grammar (verb agreement, articles), and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Aim for 2–3 sentences and replace unclear expressions like “Crane Space” and “a load of photos” with precise descriptions.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I visit interesting places such as parks or city viewpoints, I feel relaxed and confident, so I usually spend time taking a series of landscape and detail shots.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence then add specific reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Fix grammar and awkward phrases (e.g., “naturally there,” “sunlight thing,” “make me make”). Use precise descriptions of how light and quiet improve photos.

Example: I prefer rural areas because I love wide open landscapes and fresh air. For instance, I often photograph at sunrise, since the soft golden light and peaceful surroundings create more dramatic and detailed images.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer (own country or abroad), use correct words and grammar (e.g., not “boats,” fix “keep your how it changes,” avoid slang like “wanna” and unclear words like “burden”). Give balanced, specific reasons and link ideas with words like “however” or “also.” Keep within 1–3 concise sentences.

Example: I prefer photographing scenery in my own country because I know the locations well and can capture how they change across the seasons. However, I would also like to travel abroad to photograph different cultures and spectacular landscapes to broaden my portfolio.

× Yes, I like taking a picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'different views' implies more than one picture. Use plural nouns when referring to multiple items; change 'a picture' to 'pictures'. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' whenever you mean more than one image.

× When I go somewhere that is Crane Space, it's makes me confident and relax that I will take a load of photos.

✓ When I go somewhere like Crane Space, it makes me feel confident and relaxed, and I take a lot of photos.

Multiple issues: 'that is Crane Space' is unnatural; use 'like Crane Space' or 'to Crane Space'. 'it's makes' combines contraction and verb incorrectly; use 'it makes'. After 'make' for feelings use infinitive or adjective: 'make me feel confident and relaxed'. 'a load of photos' is informal but acceptable; 'a lot of photos' is clearer. Sentence structure was corrected to proper clauses. Suggestion: Keep subject-verb agreement and use correct adjective forms after 'feel'.

× I prefer rural areas because I love the open landscapes and naturally there.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I love the open landscapes and the natural environment there.

The phrase 'naturally there' is incorrect. The definite article 'the' needed with 'natural environment' to specify what 'there' refers to. Also 'naturally' (adverb) was incorrectly used instead of adjective 'natural'. Suggestion: Use 'the natural environment there' or 'the nature there'.

× I often take photos and videos at sunrise when the sunlight thing and quiet surroundings make me make my pictures look much better.

✓ I often take photos and videos at sunrise when the sunlight and quiet surroundings make my pictures look much better.

'Sunlight thing' is ungrammatical; remove 'thing' and use 'the sunlight'. 'make me make my pictures' is redundant; use 'make my pictures look'. Also 'surroundings' is fine. Clean sentence of extra words and correct object placement. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases like 'the sunlight' and avoid unnecessary pronouns.

× I prefer boats at home.

✓ I prefer staying at home.

'I prefer boats at home' is likely incorrect and unclear: 'boats' does not fit context. If the student meant 'being at home' or 'views at home', use 'staying at home' or 'views at home'. Pronoun/reference error causes semantic confusion. Suggestion: Replace unclear noun with intended phrase, e.g., 'I prefer views at home' or 'I prefer staying at home'.

× I love photographing the local scenery because I know the area well and can keep your how it changes with the season.

✓ I love photographing the local scenery because I know the area well and can keep track of how it changes with the seasons.

'Can keep your how' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'keep track of how'. 'Season' should be plural 'seasons' when referring to changes across different seasons. Pronoun 'your' is incorrect and was removed. Suggestion: Use 'keep track of' to indicate monitoring changes and pluralize 'seasons'.

× But I also wanna travel abroad to experience new cultures and spectacular landscape and burden my travel experience.

✓ But I also want to travel abroad to experience new cultures and spectacular landscapes and broaden my travel experience.

'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'new cultures'. 'Burden my travel experience' is wrong word choice; 'broaden' fits meaning. This corrects modal/informal usage and vocabulary. Suggestion: Use 'want to' in formal/academic speech, pluralize parallel nouns, and choose verbs that match intent ('broaden').